Transcript Outline and Pseudo-Essay PPT

6 DEC Outline and Tri-DEC
Essay
AN INTRODUCTION
Review: Typical Single TDEC
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Thesis
Elaboration/Detail
Commentary
Example of single TDEC (T=pink, D=green, E=blue, C=yellow):
In The Sun Also Rises, Ernest Hemingway’s use of imagery advances the idea of seeking
distractions in hopes of making life feel vibrant and full. In the beginning of chapter 16, the day after Jake
and his friends watched Romero and the bullfights for the first time, it has begun raining in Pamplona
during the festival. Despite poor weather conditions which cause the “flags in the square” to “[hang] wet
from the white poles,” the festival continues, and Hemingway describes the people and elements
surrounding Jake, stating that the “concourse of Basque and Navarrais dancers and singers” dance “in their
costumes” in the rain against the backdrop of the “drums” which “[sound] hollow and damp” while the
“chiefs of the bands” ride their “big, heavy-footed horses,” and the dancers enter a café and sit with their
“tight-wound white legs under the tables.” (174). By including the abundant visual and auditory
descriptions of who and what is in the crowd, Hemingway conveys a sense of mayhem and excitement as
the festival proceeds even during a rain shower. The reader is placed in the midst of the chaos, and can
envision and hear exactly what the festival looks and sounds like—a soaked spectacle of all shapes and
sizes, pulsating to the echoes of wet drums, all of which amounts to a thriving party that convinces those
part of the group that they, too are thriving, as they are a part of the massive celebration.
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New: 6 DEC Outline for Essay
Introduction paragraph: Thesis Statement
Body Paragraph 1: Topic Sentence
 Detail
 Elaboration
 Commentary
 D
 E
 C
 D
 E
 C
III. Body Paragraph 2: Topic Sentence
 D
 E
 C
 D
 E
 C
 D
 E
 C
IV. Conclusion Paragraph
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New: 6 DEC Outline for Essay
Introduction paragraph: Thesis Statement
Body Paragraph 1: Topic Sentence
 Detail
 Elaboration
 Commentary
 D
 E
 C
 D
 E
 C
III. Body Paragraph 2: Topic Sentence
 D
 E
 C
 D
 E
 C
 D
 E
 C
IV. Conclusion Paragraph
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II.
Hey! Did you notice…
• Each Roman numeral
indicates a NEW paragraph
• The introduction
paragraph consists of JUST
the thesis statement
• There are 3 DECs within
each body paragraph
• Each body paragraph starts
with a topic sentence
6 DEC Outline and Tri-DEC Essay
 You will OUTLINE for a 6 DEC essay, but you will
only FULLY WRITE OUT the introduction
paragraph (thesis) and Body Paragraph 1
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This is so you can practice organizing an entire essay with an
outline, but still focus on fully writing out a smaller portion
6 DEC Outline and Tri-DEC Essay
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IV.
Introduction paragraph: Thesis Statement
Body Paragraph 1: Topic Sentence
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Detail
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Elaboration
All text to
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Commentary the right is
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D
JUST the
intro
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E
paragraph
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C
and body
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D
paragraph 1
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E
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C
Body Paragraph 2: Topic Sentence
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D
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E
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C
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D
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E
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C
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D
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E
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C
Conclusion Paragraph
In The Sun Also Rises, Ernest Hemingway utilizes the elements of voice to reveal the change in Brett
and Jake’s delusion about their relationship at the beginning of the novel to the clarity they achieve at the end of
the novel as they come to terms with the reality of their inability to ever be together.
One of the first scenes of the novel involves the protagonists, Jake and Brett, taking a ride in a taxi, a
scene that will be echoed at the end of the novel, but whose voice will ultimately evolve away from the one of
longing desperation that is present in the beginning of the book, due to Jake and Brett’s delusional desire to be
together. Jake and Brett’s first private interaction is an emotional one, beginning as they leave a bar together to
take a taxi-ride around the city. As they watch the streets of Paris roll by outside the car window, the visual
imagery works to set the tone for what is no doubt a doomed relationship, due to, as the reader soon learns, a war
injury that has left Jake incapable of intimacy, and therefore incapable of realizing a romantic relationship. The
taxi starts out its journey traveling through the “dark,” onto “dark” streets, the only illumination present
provided by a “lighted square,” “lighted bars,” “lights from the open shops,” and the “bright light” of flares that
illuminate the street men are working to tear apart, and that briefly illuminate Brett’s face (32). The darkness
Hemingway has conjured for the reader creates a sense of all-consuming heaviness lingering over Brett and Jake,
but for moments of diversion from the dark provided by the establishments they drive by. Only the “lighted”
bars, shops, and flares illuminate their features, representing the way that Jake and Brett only seem to be able to
connect when imbibing in drink or seeking entertainment, as seen when Jake and Brett are in Paris as well as
Spain. Repeated diction continues to build on the sense of doom as they ride in the back of the cab next to each
other. They are described as sitting “apart,” yet are “jolted” closer as the cab winds its way down the street. In a
moment of dark and quiet, they kiss, only for Brett to turn “away” and “[press]” against her seat, “as far away as
she could get” (32). The words “apart” and “away’ denote distance, relating to the idea that Jake and Brett are
kept apart by life, specifically Jake’s injury, in the same way they stay apart in the car, only “jolted,” a word with a
violent connotation, together by the random jerking of the cab, just as life has swung them together time and
time again, beginning with their meeting each other during the war and falling in love, and continuing with their
various accidental meetings in Paris. Despite Brett’s hesitancy to be close to Jake, and despite the foreboding
nature of the dark, complicated streets they drive through, as they start to converse, their diction echoes their
inability to stop seeing each other, even though they are often, and sense they should be, apart. As Brett begs
Jake not to touch her, she repeats words like “don’t” and “can’t,” connoting a sense of impossibility, whereas
Jake continues to ask Brett if he “love[s]” her (33). Eventually, Brett too admits that her desire to see Jake
“always” becomes the only thing she knows. Brett goes on to use the word “hell”(33) to describe what she puts
men through, then later describes her love for Jake as “hell on earth” (34). Hemingway’s choice of the word
“hell” informs the reader that Brett finds love to be a cause of great and eternal suffering, and yet she insists she
“[has]” to see Jake, echoing Jake’s earlier statement that he “[has]” to see her, as though there is no other option,
as though this futureless love will always be their fate (33). Despite the hopelessness of the situation, they cannot
stop themselves from indulging in their desires, and they are both still clinging to the delusion of a future
together.
Essentially…
Introduction paragraph: Thesis Statement
Body Paragraph 1: Topic Sentence
 Detail
 Elaboration
 Commentary
 D
 E
 C
 D
 E
 C
III. Body Paragraph 2: Topic Sentence
 D
 E
 C
 D
 E
 C
 D
 E
 C
IV. Conclusion Paragraph
I.
II.
Fully
writing out
in essay
format
NOT fully
writing out
in essay
format
Everything
you see here
you WILL
include in
your outline
Your mission:
 You will practice writing a 6 DEC Outline and a Tri-
DEC essay over a text I will give you in class today.
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You will turn in the outline and tri-DEC essay on Tues 10/27 or
Wed 10/28
This will be a 100 point daily grade assignment
 You will then be assessed on writing a 6 DEC outline
and Tri-DEC essay in a major grade timed writing
which will take place in class on Mon 11/16 or Tues
11/17
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This is to prepare you for the timed writing portion of the AP
exam; you will hand write the outline and essay, and you will
need to pace yourself because you will have less time than
you’re used to when writing a finished product