Transcript Elaboration - North Thurston Public Schools / NTPS Overview

…Descriptive Details…
“My Lucy Friend Who Smells Like Corn”
by Sandra Cisneros
• Nixtamal is the treated corn that
is used to make masa and hominy.
First the corn is cooked and soaked
in lime, rinsed and then the hulls may
or may not be removed. This task may
seem daunting and the ingredients
may seem unusual, but they are easily
found and you will have fresher
tasting Posole, Tamales and Tortillas.
• Frito Bandito mascot 19671971
• Mercurochrome = antiseptic
for cuts/scrapes
• chrones = underwear!
Journal Write
Fill in the blanks to complete the
telling sentence below…(if it helps, you
can use more than one word in each
blank…)
__________ was the ____________
time I ever had.
Keep your journal out PLEASE!
Elaboration
Telling vs. Showing
The first person to list
all 6 expository
elaboration strategies on
their mini white board
gets 3 Ram Bucks!
Elaboration: the support or
development of an idea
with…
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Anecdotes (stories/incidents)
Examples
Definitions
Facts & Statistics
Quotes & Dialogue
Descriptive details
Developing Showing Sentences
and Paragraphs
What is the difference
between these two
sentences?
a) The room was a mess.
b) Rumpled bedspread, piled-up
clothes, and jumbled dresser
greeted me as I pushed my way into
the room.
Descriptive
Details!
Which Elaboration strategy is
used in Example B???
Definition of
Telling and Showing
• Telling is the use of broad
generalizations.
• In contrast, showing is the use of
details, facts, statistics, examples,
anecdotes, quotations, dialogue—
elaboration—to persuade, explain, or
to enliven a story.
Telling
Although it smelled
horrible, the apothecary
shop was fascinating.
Showing
Then they visited the apothecary,
which was fascinating enough to make
up for its horrible smell, a mixture of
bad eggs and rotted cabbages. Barrels
of slimy stuff stood on the floor; jars
of herbs, dried roots, and bright
powders lined the walls; bundles of
feathers, strings of fangs, and snarled
claws hung from the ceiling…
Showing (continued)
…Harry himself examined
silver unicorn horns at
twenty-one Galleons each
and miniscule, glittery-black
beetle eyes (five knuts a
scoop).
J.K. Rowling, Harry Potter and the Sorcerer’s
Stone (New York, Scholastic Inc., 1997), p.81.
Which
Elaboration
strategy is
this?
Descriptive
Details!
Telling
In the 1930’s the dust storms
were horrible.
Showing
Every morning the house had to be
cleaned. Everett Buckland of
Waynocka said, “If you didn’t sweep
the dust out right quick between the
storms, you’d end up scooping it out
with a shovel.” And every morning
someone had to go check the animals.
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What Elaboration strategy
do you see?
Showing (continued)
. . .The fierce gales buried chickens,
pigs, dogs, cats, and occasionally
cattle. Children were assigned the
task of cleaning the nostrils of cows
two or three times a day.
Jerry Stanley, Children of the Dust Bowl (New York, Crown Publishers
Inc., 1992), p. 7.
Telling
The Metrodome has the worst
rug in baseball.
Showing
The Metrodome has the worst rug in
baseball, excluding Joe Pepitone’s.
“There are wet spots on the turf you can
slip on,” says Twins centerfielder Torli
Hunter, giving a tour of the Metrodome
and sounding like the world’s worst real
estate agent.
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Showing (continued)
. . . . .“I lost five balls in the roof today. I
was scared out there. There are seams in
the turf, and if the ball hits one of those,
you’re done. It can take a big hop or a
dead hop. There are poles behind the
wall”—the pillars that support the drapery
in right field— “and you don’t know where
they are. So a ball can hit the wall and just
drop, or it can hit the wall (pole) and take
off. You don’t know.”
Steve Rushin, “Dome Sweet Dome,” Sports Illustrated (October 14, 2002), p.25
What Elaboration strategies do you see?
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