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INDUSTRIALIZ ATION
DBQ
Y E S , I T ’ S F I N A L LY G R A D E D
MOST COMMON ISSUES:
1. Start with your argument first, then use the documents as evidence.
The DBQ should not read like a list where you just talk about each
document in order. Sprinkle in outside information and analysis.
2. Transitions and topic sentences are important and will help you avoid
#1.
3. Don’t quote the documents. Time would be better spent analyzing with
HIPP.
4. Make HIPP clear to the reader. Have a backup (5/7 docs).
5. No credit for incorrectly analyzed documents.
6. Great Depression was not good synthesis unless you discuss that it
was this industrial process which led to overproduction which led to
buying on credit which led to the depression.
7. Please don’t write things like “and that is what made the US the
country it is today.” It looks bad and makes me shed real tears.
IN CASE YOU FORGOT THE PROMPT:
• Evaluate the effects of industrialization on U.S.
society in the years 1865-1900.
GREAT EXAMPLE OF
CONTEXTUALIZATION:
“ In the late 19th century and early 20th century, industrialization
brought significant effects on the U.S. society, largely due to the
introduction of technological advancement which encouraged rapid
growth in corporations and industry. This growth was so rapid that it
caused many social issues to erupt, like unsanitary conditions that
resulted in the formation of labor organizations such as the American
Federation of Labor. These organizations helped to advocate workers
rights. This time period also experienced a large amount of
immigrants coming to the U.S. for better job opportunity. However,
overall it was a corrupt political era in American history that allowed
a small minority to acquire the majority of the wealth, causing the
rest to suffer.” (4th period)
ANOTHER GREAT EXAMPLE OF
CONTEXTUALIZATION:
“ The Gilded Age can be mostly defined by a laissez faire economic system, an
economic system that entailed a lack of government interference in business.
This lack of government interference allowed business to monopolize industry,
create trusts, and flourish overall.” (7th period)
“The years of 1865 to 1900, or the Gilded Age, were very corrupt times. During
this time the idea of laissez faire was being practiced. The government had
started to ‘leave business alone,’ or letting the people run their own businesses.
The people favored this idea until the government stopped intervening when the
monopolists began having major influences in the government positions, like the
Senate. The government began putting down labor unions and that led to strikes
by the laborers like the Homestead and Pullman Strikes.” (7th period)
GREAT EXAMPLES OF SYNTHESIS:
1. A development in a different historical time period, situation,
era, geographical location:
“The Gilded Age was a time when the rich got richer and poverty spread
like a sickness amongst Americans. Luckily with the help of Progressivists
like Jane Addams and Ida B. Wells things began to look better. People began
to see corruption and fighting back. Soon we’ll see workers rights arise
and further exposition of political corruption thanks to people like Jacob
Riis who raised awareness of poverty among the rich… the economic,
political, and societal troubles would begin to resolve.” (4th period)
2. Course theme not directly addressed in essay:
“Although migration/settlement is not the focus point, industrialization
also affected the settlement of the Gilded Age. Many people that formerly
lived in rural areas moved to urban centers during this time because they
could find more job opportunities due to the greatly expanding factory
system.” (6th period)
GREAT EXAMPLES OF OUTSIDE
INFORMATION:
• Triangle shirtwaist factory fire
• Vanderbilt/Railroads connecting the US for trade and urbanization
• Women in the workplace
• Immigration and immigrants working in factories
• Political machines- Tweed Ring/Tammany Hall
• Tenement housing/slums/Jacob Riis
• Strikes- Pullman Strike/Haymarket Square Riot
• Technology- electricity at work and home
• Social Darwinism