Transcript PEE Paragraphs

12/1/15 PEER PARAGRAPHS
TP: Good readers are able to analyse texts
Bell work. Put this PEER into order:
‘The red sauce trickled down from his lips, down over his chin
on to his black jacket.’ It could be because he is in a rush to
get food as he hasn’t eaten for a long time, or perhaps he is
not used to other people watching him. This shows that he
eats in a disgusting way and gets food all over himself. Skellig
has no table manners and is a messy eater.
Point
Evidence
Explanation
Response
Skellig has no table manners and is a messy
Point
eater.
‘The red sauce trickled down from his lips,
down over his chin on to his black jacket.’
Evidence
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This shows that he eats in a disgusting way
and gets food all over himself. It could be Explanati
because he is in a rush to get food as he
hasn’t eaten for a long time, or perhaps he
is not used to other people watching him
eat.
Response
INTRODUCTION: USING POINT, EVIDENCE,
EXPLANATION AND RESPONSE (PEER)
 When
you are writing about a text or discussing a
text it is very important that you use quotes to back
up what you are saying.
 Using PEER is a way of writing about a text making
sure that you include textual evidence.
 Using PEER will help you get a better level in
reading.
 It proves you understand and can write about what
you have read.
IDENTIFY THE POINT, EVIDENCE,
EXPLANATION AND RESPONSE
In pairs, look at the paragraph below and decide
what is the Point, Evidence, Explanation and
Response. When you’re done, write this out and
label it in your books:
It seems like it must be really bad for Michael to
react that way. ‘I tried not to breathe, not to smell
him.’ Michael thinks that Skellig smells awful. Even
though Michael is helping Skellig, he doesn’t want
to smell the horrible smell coming from him.
IDENTIFY THE POINT, EVIDENCE AND
EXPLANATION
(Point) Michael thinks that Skellig smells awful.
(Evidence) ‘I tried not to breathe, not to smell him.’
(Explanation) Even though Michael is helping Skellig,
he doesn’t want to smell the horrible smell coming
from him. (Response) It seems like it must be really
bad for Michael to react that way.
COPY THE FOLLOWING DOWN TO HELP
YOU USE PEER
 Point
– What does the quote show in very
simple terms?
 Evidence – This is a ‘quote’ taken from the
text to prove or support what it is that you
are saying.
 Explanation – This is where you give a
more detailed explanation of the point.
 Response – include your own personal
opinion here.
WHAT’S THE WORST THAT COULD HAPPEN?
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There are some great descriptions of people
in the story “What’s the Worst that Can
Happen?” which tell us something about the
characters the writer’s describing.
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Murphy: “Sometimes I think Murphy’s law –
you know, ‘If something can go wrong, it will’
– was invented just for me.”
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What do you think this quote tells us about
Murphy?
“Sometimes I think Murphy’s law – you know, ‘If
something can go wrong, it will’ – was invented just for
me.”
Now it’s your turn
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Write a PEER paragraph about Murphy, based
on the quote we have been looking at.
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You don’t have to use all the quote, just the
bit which is important to the point you’re
making.
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What does this quote reveal about Murphy?
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Don’t forget to add your personal response.
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NOTE: Don’t just repeat your point in your
explanation!
Exemplar PEER
Murphy believes he is unlucky. At the
beginning of the story, Murphy says,
“Sometimes I think Murphy’s law – you
know, ‘If something can go wrong, it will’ –
was invented just for me.” The fact Murphy
shares his name with this law and thinks it
was ‘invented’ for him shows that things
never go right for him. I feel sorry for Murphy
because it must be difficult to always deal
with things going wrong.
Individual Task
 Decide
which story – Sammy’s Choice or
What’s the Worst that Could Happen? –
you want to write about for your essay.
 Look back at the points and evidence
you gathered for that story.
 Pick the best two for each of the three
tasks and turn them into PEER paragraphs.
13/1/15 Critical Essay
TP: Good writers are able to use the PEER
technique effectively to write critically
Bell work: What does PEER stand for? Why is
the PEER technique useful when writing an
essay?
14/1/15 Critical Essay
TP: Good writers are able to use the PEER
technique effectively to write critically
Bell work: Identify whether each group of words is
a complete sentence, fragment, or a run-on.
1. Yellow is a soothing colour.
2. Catching the school bus.
3. Before she left for school.
4. The crowd cheered.
5. Today is a beautiful day there is no chance of
rain.
6. The boy plays soccer, his best friend is on the
team.
15/1/15 Critical Essay
TP: Good writers are able to use the PEER
technique effectively to write critically
Bell work: Identify whether each group of words is
a complete sentence, fragment, or a run-on.
1.
2.
3.
4.
Karen plays the drums, she practices everyday.
That I remember when I was a child.
If it is raining, we will not be able to go outside.
Listening to the speaker, I started to daydream.
18/1/15 Critical Essay
TP: Continue working on our essays
Bell work: COPY the sentences, adding commas where
necessary.
1.
Students without funds for example may now borrow
money easily.
2.
While I enjoy reading most stories I am particularly
interested in historical fiction.
3.
Both Francis Bacon the philosopher and Francis
Bacon the painter have contributed to mankind.
4.
Carl Monroe the chairman of the board of directors
was once a well known television personality
19/1/15 Critical Essay
TP: Continue working on our essays
Bell work: Write out the CORRECTED version of each
sentence. You may need to add punctuation,
remove or add words/letters or correct the grammar.
1.
Give the money to Rawya and I.
2.
My cats they love to sharpen their claws.
3.
My favourite colours are red orange and green.
4.
Mourad my best friends likes to play pranks on
people.
20/1/15 Critical Essay
TP: Continue working on our essays
Bell work: Write out the CORRECTED version of
each sentence. You may need to add
punctuation, remove or add words/letters or
correct the grammar.
1.
2.
3.
4.
Whose turn is it to babysit she and he?
Lets eat Grandma.
I was born on April 27 2003 and she was born two
years later.
When it get’s cold I cant not get out of bed.