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Thesis Statements
(definitions of)
 The
single, specific claim that your essay supports
 a short statement, usually one sentence, that
summarizes the main point or claim of an essay,
research paper, etc., and is developed,
supported, and explained in the text by means of
examples and evidence.
 The statement serving as the organizing principle of
the text and usually appears in the introductory
paragraph often at the end.
 A controlling idea for an entire paper or a book
A good thesis statement will
usually include these
attributes:
1)
take on a subject upon which reasonable
people could disagree
2)
deal with a subject that can be adequately
treated given the nature of the assignment
3)
express one main idea
4)
assert your conclusions about a subject
(Indiana University)
Elements in a thesis statement
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Subject
precise opinions
“blueprint” of reasons (or how you’re
going to show to the reader you’re point
of view – these are the details you’ll
expand on in the body of your essay)
Based on these wedding
invitations, what do you expect?
Revisiting Introductions
You never get a second chance to make a
first impression.
What are you introducing in your introduction?
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Your topic (and it’s importance)
Your writing style
Your approach
A reason to keep reading
Strategies…
What’s the question? What’s the context?
 What
question are you trying to answer?
(Seriously, write it out…)
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your thesis is the answer
 Who
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is your audience?
What did they want you to learn?/What do you
want them to learn?
When introducing…
 Introduce
the topic with some indication of its
inherent interest or importance, and a clear
definition of the boundaries of the subject area
 Indicate the structure and/or methodology of
the essay, often with the major sections of the
essay or its structural principle clearly stated
 State the thesis of the essay, preferably in a
single, arguable statement with a clear main
clause
Approaching your
introduction.
You do NOT have to write the introduction
first.
Five pitfalls
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The place holder introduction.
The restated question introduction.
The Webster’s Dictionary introduction.
The “dawn of man” introduction.
The book report introduction.
Introducing your introduction
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an intriguing example
After Huck and Jim have reacquainted, Huck learns that there is a reward out for
Jim, but that there is no suspicion about his (Huck’s) whereabouts. Already a safe
distance away, Huck could have pursued his own freedom more safely alone.
Instead, Huck returns to find Jim and he binds their fates together: “Git up and
hump yourself Jim…They’re after us.”
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a provocative quotation
Mark Twain, author of Adventures of Huckleberry Finn, once said, “A successful book is
not made of what is in it, but of what is left out of it.”
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a puzzling scenario
It’s the antebellum south on the Mississippi River, and there is a raft holding two
middle-aged white men, a thirteen year old boy, and a man in chains who has
seemingly been painted blue and is wearing a sign that says, “Angry Arab.”
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anecdote
Last Sunday, I was at Starbucks frantically trying to prepare for my quiz the next
day when a man at the table next to me asked me what I was reading.
“Adventures of Huckleberry Finn – it’s required for my English class,” I responded.
“Required!” he snorted. "It ought to be banned. That book is racist!”
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a thought-provoking question
While teaching Adventures of Huckleberry Finn, my teacher decided not to say
the controversial “N” word that is littered throughout the text. Why then, did this
same teacher reject using Allan Gibben’s 2011 publication that does the exact
same thing?
For tomorrow:
 Choosing
from today’s suggestions (a
puzzling scenario, an anecdote, a
provocative quotation, a thoughtprovoking question, an intriguing
example) write an introduction for your
paper.
 Bring a working/starter thesis for your
paper (the answer to the question).
The introduction…so how is it?
 What
do you expect the paper to discuss?
 What
kinds of evidence the paper will use?
 What
the tone of the paper will be?
Conclusions
Conclusions (or so what??)
Let’s just tell your reader WHY they’ve read
this paper.
Conclusions
Conceptualize your conclusion.
 If
the introduction was an invitation, think of the
conclusion as a parting gift
 If
the introduction is a bridge into the word of the
paper; conclusion as a bridge to take your paper
into the world
 Conclusion
as real world reason to read your essay
--------------------------------------------------------------- Conclusion as a “last word” in an argument
 Conclusion as a call to action.
Conclusions
Pitfalls for conclusions:
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“That’s my story and I’m sticking to it.”
Ending with a rephrased thesis statement without any
substantive changes
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Overused phrases
“In conclusion,” “in summary,” or “in closing” (often indicates
“That’s my story and I’m sticking to it)
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Sherlock Holmes
Stating the thesis for the first time in the conclusion
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Grab bag
Introducing a new idea or subtopic in your conclusion.
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Uninformed political speech
Making sentimental, emotional appeals that are out of
character with the rest of an analytical paper.
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Last grab
Including evidence (quotations, statistics, etc.) that should be
in the body of the paper.
In complete sentences,
please answer:
How do the points of my paper fit together?
(Synthesize)
2. What is interesting about these points? Or…
Answer at least one of the following takeaways:
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What can the reader take away that is useful when
reading AOHF?
What can the reader take away that is useful in their
own life?
What can the reader take into the world around
them?
ROUGH DRAFT TIME
MLA (format only)
1.
Did you use the template?
2.
Are there one inch margins all around your
paper?
3.
Is the entire paper double spaced?
4.
Do you have your name, my name, the class,
and the date – “European style” -- on the
paper?
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6.
Is your last name and page number in the upper
right hand corner of the paper?
Is your title centered above your text (it should
not be underlined or italicized)?
Introduction (see slides 4 – 10)
1.
In the left hand margin, write WHICH
(puzzling scenario, etc.) introduction you
sampled from our class lesson.
2.
If you didn’t choose to use one, say what
one you tried and why you didn’t choose it.
3.
Ask yourself if your introduction FITS with your
paper. Does your introduction speak to the
same things that your paper explores?
Rough Draft Work
Check list
 Thesis
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Statement (see slides 1-3)
Circle your roadmap
Underline your “claim that a reasonable person
could argue with”
Write your topic
Structure
Compare and Contrast
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Make a box around transitions.
Using arrows, connect boxes to their points of
comparison.
Ask yourself what the structure of your essay is,
and write this in a mini-outline format at the
top of the paper (Intro, A/B, A/B, A/B
Conclusion; Intro A, B, A+B=C)
In the right margin, write the purpose of your
paragraph, and then ask if every element
(transition, quote, analysis)fits with that
purpose.
Quotes – visit each set
BEFORE the quotation, verify that you properly
chose a comma, colon, or nothing (especially
with as and that) to introduce your quote?
1. After ensuring it’s correct, put a square
around all punctuation that introduces a
quote.
When quoting a text, did you use the QUO PAR
PUNC Method?
1. Put a square around this, too.
Analysis
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2)
In each body paragraph, circle a piece
of analysis.
Ask yourself it this analysis is interesting
AND appropriate for your paper?
Writing
1. Sentence Variety: Underline any NOUN that falls
at the first word of a sentence.
2. Parallel Construction: issues (look with lists, not
only…but also; either….or, etc.)
3. Look for subject-verb agreement (think of
“weird” ones – nobody, one, each, neither, etc.)
4. When a sentence begins with a dependent
clause, is there a comma afterwards?
Onto conclusions
DON’T come our of nowhere
 Answer
“So What?”
 Come full-circle. Return to the theme from
the introduction with parallel concepts
and/or images.
 Synthesize, don’t simply summarize.
 Propose a course of action, a solution to
an issue, or questions for further study. *
 Point to broader implications.