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(1). Read the following sentence.
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jacki robinson the first African American
major-league baseball player played his first
game with the brooklyn dodgers in 1947.
Jacki Robinson, the first African American
major-league baseball player, played his first
game with the Brooklyn Dodgers in 1947.
Would you believe that over 7000 years ago
Ancient egyptians liked to bowl on alleys alot
like ours.
Would you believe that over 7,000 years ago
ancient Egyptians liked to bowl on alleys a lot
like ours?
Before players begun wearing safety gear football
produced so many injurys that Colleges often
banned the game.
Before players began wearing safety gear,
football produced so many injuries that colleges
often banned the game.
Jerry Rice hold the nfl record for
touchdowns: two hundred five.
Jerry Rice holds the NFL record for
touchdowns: 205.
Until 1892 all professional boxing
matches was slugged out with bear fists.
Until 1892, all professional boxing
matches were slugged out with bare fists.
Ill bet you didn’t no that youll sleep
through
one third of you’re life.
I’ll bet you didn’t know that you’ll
sleep through one-third of your life.
canned foods was first developed in
order to feed napoleans army.
Canned foods were first developed in
order to feed Napolean’s army.
During the middle ages in england
beer was oftenest served with
breakfast.
During the Middle Ages in England, beer
was most often served with breakfast.
in china brides traditionally adorn
their selves in bright red.
In China, brides traditionally adorn
themselves in bright red.
When a dessert lizard sense danger it
vibrates too instantly sink beneath the
sand.
When a desert lizard senses danger, it
vibrates to instantly sink beneath the
sand.
Would you beleive a catapillar have about
4000 muscles in it’s body?
Would you believe a caterpillar has about
4,000 muscles in its body?
A mosquitos wings beats about 1000
times a second the annoying hum comes
from it’s beating wings.
A mosquito’s wings beat about 1,000
times a second; the annoying hum comes
from its beating wings.
When a llama get mad it spits thick badsmelling saliva into its enemies face.
When a llama gets mad, it spits thick,
bad-smelling saliva into its enemy’s face.
When a llama gets mad, it spits thick,
bad-smelling saliva into its enemy’s face.
Lobsters walks around on 8 legs just as
spider’s do.
Lobsters walk around on eight legs just
as spiders do.
A baby squirel is born with its eyes closed
and it keeps them closed four about a
month
A baby squirrel is born with its eyes
closed, and it keeps them closed for about
a month.
Starfish dont have no legs but they can
creep around on alot of little tube feet.
Starfish don’t have legs, but they can
creep around on a lot of little tube feet.
The most largest bird is the Ostrich it
weigh as much as 300 pounds.
The largest bird is the ostrich; it
weighs as much as 300 pounds.
Ostriches cant fly but it can run as fast
as forty miles per hour.
Ostriches can’t fly, but they can run as
fast as 40 miles per hour.
Are rhinoceros horns which both male
and female have mades of hardened hare?
Really, are rhinoceros horns, which both
male and female rhinoceros have, made
of hardened hair?
Dolphins one of the mostly intelligent
creatures on this planet lives in the ocean.
Dolphins, one of the most intelligent
creatures on this planet, live in the ocean.
Pluto the most small planet in our solar
system travel around the sun every 248
years.
Pluto, the smallest planet in our solar
system, travels around the sun every 248
years.
It takes the moon a little more than
twenty-seven day’s about a month to
orbit Earth.
It takes the moon a little more than 27
days, about a month, to orbit Earth.
Earth move threw space at sixty six
thousand seven hundred miles per hour
Earth moves through space at 66,700
miles per hour.
If you had read the assignment you
would of discovered that skin are the
larger organ of the human body.
If you had read the assignment, you
would have discovered that skin is the
largest organ of the human body.
You’re sense of smell is the first sense to
go to sleep at night and the last one that
wakes up in the mourning.
Your sense of smell is the first sense to
go to sleep at night and the last one to
wake up in the morning.
The harder bone in the Human body
are the jawbone; or mandible.
The hardest bone in the human body is
the jawbone, or mandible.
Albert einstein a german-born
physicist discovered that the force of
Gravity can bend light.
Albert Einstein, a German-born
physicist, discovered that the force of
gravity can bend light.
Honey is sweet, nutritious, and spoilage is
never a problem it’s an favorite food of
bears badgers and humans, to.
Honey is sweet, nutritious, and never
spoils; it’s a favorite food of bears,
badgers and humans, too.
A disease called ichthyosis turn human
skin scaly as a fishs this disease is
hereditary.
A disease called ichthyosis turns
human skin scaly like a fish’s; this
disease is hereditary.
Action speak more louder then words’.
Actions speak louder than words.
The only way to have an friend are to
be 1.
The only way to have a friend is to be
one.
Advice is something the wise dont
never need and Fools wont never take.
Advice is something the wise don’t
need, and fools won’t take.
Everything have it’s beauty but not
everyone see it.
Everything has its beauty, but not
everyone sees it.
Wow, the empire state building has
10,000,000 bricks in their structure!
Wow, the Empire State Building has 10
million bricks in its structure!
Of all the states in are country alaska
have the most longest coastline and the
smallest population.
Of all the states in our country, Alaska
has the longest coastline and the
smallest population.
The boot of italy look as though it kick
the island of sicily.
The boot of Italy looks as though it
kicks the island of Sicily.
In the year of 2050 paris is 2099 years
old.
In the of year 2050, Paris will be 2,099
years old.
Jamaica is a island that lays ninety
miles South of cuba.
Jamaica is an island that lies 90 miles
south of Cuba.
China has the larger population of any
country in the world, more then a
billion people live their.
China has the largest population of any
country in the world; more than a
billion people live there.
The persian gulf contain extremely
salty water and isn’t more then 100 feet
deep at any point.
The Persian Gulf contains extremely
salty water and isn’t more than 100 feet
deep at any point.
It is dark 24 hours a day four one
hundred eighty six days of the year at
the north pole.
It is dark 24 hours a day for 186 days of
the year at the North Pole.
Mesopotamians who lived in what is
today called iraq developed written
language around 3500 B.C.E.
Mesopotamians, who lived in what is
today called Iraq, developed written
language around 3500 B.C.E.
When Alexander the great died his
body was preserved in a big pot of
honey
When Alexander the Great died, his
body was preserved in a big pot of
honey.
Constantine the Great was the first roman
emperor to declare his self a christian,
Christianity then becomed legal in Rome
in 313.
Constantine the Great was the first
Roman emperor to declare himself a
Christian; Christianity then became legal
in Rome in 313.
The hundred Years’ War which lasted
from 1337to 1453 was an English-French
conflict fought four control of france.
The Hundred Years’ War, which lasted
from 1337 to 1453, was an English-French
conflict fought for control of France.
Joan Of Arc a famous French Warrior in the
Hundred Years’ War was considered a heretic,
tried for this crime, and burned at the Stake in
1431.
Joan of Arc, a famous French Warrior in the
Hundred Years’ War, was considered a
heretic, tried for this crime, and burned at the
stake in 1431.
Elizabeth I was queen of england she was
completly bald at the age of 29 and always
wore a red wig.
Elizabeth I was queen of England; she was
completely bald at the age of 29 and
always wore a red wig.
The first british theater know simply as
the theatre were built outside London
in 1576.
The first British theater, known simply
as The Theatre, was built outside
London in 1576.
The Great Plague breaked out in
london in 1656 it killed 75000 people
between July and October.
The Great Plague broke out in London
in 1656; it killed 75,000 people between
July and October.
In 1812 napolean invades Russia but
only 20,000 of his 60,000 men survived
the russian winter.
In 1812, Napolean invaded Russia, but
only 20,000 of his 60,000 men survived
the Russian winter.
Photography were invented buy french
painter Louis Daguerre in 1839.
Photography was invented buy French
painter, Louis Daguerre, in 1839.
In 1912 the titanic the larger ocean liner of it’s
time hit an iceberg and sinked in the freezing
northern waters of the Atlantic.
In 1912, the Titanic, the largest ocean liner of
its time, hit an iceberg and sank in the
freezing northern waters of the Atlantic.
In the year after world war I ended
Adolf hitler becomed a member of
Germanys Nazi Party.
In the year after World War I ended,
Adolf Hitler became a member of
Germany’s Nazi Party.
In 1971, Switzerland which is located at the
Southeastern border of Germany became the
last Western nation too give women the rite to
vote.
In 1971, Switzerland, which is located at the
southeastern border of Germany, became the
last Western nation to give women the right
to vote.
The national cancer institute say that 70%
of the plants useful in treating cancer
come from rain forests.
The National Cancer Institute says that
70 percent of the plants useful in treating
cancer come from rain forests.
100 lbs. of rainwater are needed to
produce 1 pound of grain.
One hundred pounds of rainwater is
needed to produce one pound of grain.
The enviromental protection agency
(epa) were founded in 1970.
The Environmental Protection Agency
(EPA) was founded in 1970.
If american’s carpooled regularly more
then 600,000 gallons of gas cold be
saved every day.
If Americans carpooled regularly, more
than 600,000 gallons of gas could be
saved every day.
Did you no that the average american
Office Worker throw away 180 lbs. of
paper every year.
Did you know that the average American
office worker throws away 180 pounds of
paper every year.
Are Science teacher mentioned last weak
that the worlds population has more then
doubled since 1950.
Our science teacher mentioned last week
that the world’s population has more than
doubled since 1950.
It has been estimated that american’s
throw away twenty eight million tons of
branchs mowed grass and dead leafs every
year.
It has been estimated that Americans
throw away 28 million tons of branches,
mowed grass, and dead leaves every year.
American’s uses about 8 times more
fuel energy then people anywhere else
in the world.
Americans use about eight times more
fuel energy than people anywhere else
in the world.
Christopher columbus ships was the
Nina, the pinta and the Santa maria.
Christopher Columbus’ ships were the
Nina, the Pinta and the Santa Maria.
In 1634, Maryland was founded as a
Catholic colony.
In 1634 maryland were founded as an
catholic colony.
Pennsylvania quakers first protests,
against Slavery was made in 1688.
Pennsylvania Quakers’ first protests
against slavery were made in 1688.
During the american revolution more
colonists fighted on the side of Britain
then on the side of the colonies.
During the American Revolution, more
colonists fought on the side of Britain
than on the side of the colonies.
Harriet Tubman an escaped slave free
seven hundred fifty slaves in a raid.
Harriet Tubman, an escaped slave,
freed 750 slaves in a raid.
In 1981 Sandra Day O’Connor
st
becomed the 1 woman too set on the
Supreme court.
In 1981, Sandra Day O’Connor became
the first woman to sit on the Supreme
Court.
In 1916 Jeannette Rankin of montana
were the first woman to get her elected
to congress.
In 1916, Jeannette Rankin of Montana
was the first woman to get herself
elected to Congress.