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Brush Strokes
Painting with words
Adding an Absolute
Brush Stroke #1
The car went into the parking lot.
-
We are going to add a brush
stroke called an absolute.
- Consists of a noun and -ing
word
- Usually at the beginning or the
end
The car went into the parking lot.
Engine smoking, gears grinding, the car went
into the parking lot.
The car went into the parking lot, wheels
squeaking, bumper dragging.
Your turn...
1. Create a simple
sentence by
describing the
image.
2. Paint two absolutes
at the beginning or
end of your
sentence.
Here’s an example of what you could have
written.
SS) The man surfed big waves.
- Sun shining, fierce wind blowing, the man
surfed big waves.
- The man surfed big waves, body leaning,
face tightening with concentration.
Try another one...
1. Start with a simple
sentence.
2. Add the two
absolute brush
strokes.
3. Share!
Go apply this to your
writing!
Adding an Appositive
Brush Stroke #2
Appositives
Painting with an appositive brush stroke is like
capturing the same subject with images from
two different perspectives.
After a noun in a basic sentence, you can add
another noun, set off by commas, to paint a
better image in the mind of your reader.
Example:
The car went into the parking lot.
The car, a 1936 Ford, went into the parking lot.
Your turn...
1. Examine the photo
and create a simple
sentence about the
soldier.
2. Then zoom in with
commas after the
word soldier.
Your turn… Continued
3. Think about another
label for a soldier.
Maybe- recruit, a veteran, a
father, a marine, or a renegade
.
4. Build an appositive
phrase by describing the
noun with one or two
descriptive words.
Some examples...
The soldier waited patiently for the rest of his
platoon.
The soldier, a tired marine clutching his
assault rifle, waited patiently for the rest of his
platoon.
The soldier, an eager new recruit, waited
patiently for the rest of his platoon.
Try one more!
1. Start with a simple
sentence.
2. Look for the noun,
and add the
appositive phrase
using commas.
Go apply this to your
writing!
Adding a Participle
Brush Stroke #3
Participle Brush Stroke
- Similar to absolute, but without the noun.
- Adding -ing word or an -ing phrase to the
beginning or end of the sentence.
The car went into the parking lot.
You can use one participle phrase:
Sliding on the loose gravel, the car went into
the parking lot.
You can also use 3 one word participles:
Bouncing, clunking, rattling, the car went into
the parking lot.
You try...
1) Create a simple
sentence using the
picture.
2) Paint the image with
either one participial
phrase or three oneword participles at the
beginning or end of your
sentence.
The python climbed closer.
Sliding silently down the tree, the python
climbed closer.
Slithering, hovering, thinking, the python
climbed closer.
Try another one...
1) Using the -ing at
the beginning or
end in a single
participle phrase
2) Using 3 -ing one
word participles
Go apply this to your
writing!
Adjectives out of Order
Brush Stroke #4
The horse ran across the field.
Your teacher says… “Add more description”.
Your write:
- The large, white, muscular horse ran across
the field.
- You added adjectives, but they don’t seem
so powerful.
The car went into the parking lot.
We typically write like this...
- The old, dented, rusty car went into the
parking lot.
Two consecutive adjectives are positioned after
the noun.
- The old car, dented and rusty, went into the
parking lot.
You try...
The ______ baby
leopard, ________and
________, listened to
his father’s
commanding roar.
Another one...
Rewrite this sentence
using the “out of
order” strategy.
His soiled, wrinkled,
calloused hands
portrayed a life of hard
labor.
On your own...
1. Write a simple
sentence.
2. Think of 3
adjectives to
describe.
3. Edit your sentence.