Transcript The Maker’s Eye Donald M. Murray

The Maker’s Eye
Donald M. Murray
Megan Horn
Kelsey Myers
Greg Drissel
Greg Foley
The Maker’s Eye - Overview
Students typically feel that their writing is done after
the first draft.
Professionals complete many drafts and oftentimes feel
their writing is never done.
Roald Dahl: 150+ revisions
Murray outlines eight steps for revising writing and
improving drafts:
The Maker’s Eye:
Creative Writing
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The Maker’s Eye - Information
Specific, accurate, and interesting content.
Start with an abundance of information.
Creative Writing - Information
Derek Jonathan Sybil limped sluggishly into his
parent’s single-story green house with white trim, the
one that they were barely able to keep because rent was
so high these days but they still managed to do okay,
and began to complain bitterly about the worst day
he’d ever had at school, at least since he was seven
years old and Dan Nelson beat him up behind the
jungle gym.
The Maker’s Eye - Meaning
Information should be something actually significant
to what is being written about.
Each point should be a stepping stone toward the next
piece of information.
Creative Writing - Meaning
Derek limped quietly through the front door, and
began to complain bitterly to himself about the worst
day he’d ever had at school.
The Maker’s Eye - Audience
Authors should put themselves in the shoes of the
readers so they create something that has relevance /
importance to the reader.
Creative Writing - Audience
Derek limped quietly through the front door, already
muttering to himself bitterly about the worst day of
middle school he’d ever had.
The Maker’s Eye - Form
The vehicle that carries meaning to the reader
Cannot be selected until the writer has adequate
information
Creative Writing - Form
Fiction/Nonfiction
Poem
Flash Fiction
Free Form
Novel/Novella
Short Story
Script
Graphic Novel
The Maker’s Eye - Structure
Logical progression in the structure of the writing.
Creative Writing - Structure
Quickly the day had dissolved into the worst of Derek’s
life. Middle school is awful, he thought to himself as he
limped quietly through the front door.
The Maker’s Eye - Development
Must give readers enough information so that they are
satisfied & not asking for more.
Most beginning writers under develop their writing.
Creative Writing Development
Quickly the day had dissolved into the worst of Derek’s
life. Middle school is awful, German class is hard, Susie
Richards is a pain, and everything is terrible, he thought to
himself as he limped quietly through the front door.
The Maker’s Eye - Dimension
Adding and subtracting details from the writing to
achieve balance.
Creative Writing - Dimension
The Maker’s Eye - Voice
The force that drives a piece of writing forward.
Expression of writer’s authority and concern.
Creative Writing - Voice
Quickly the day had dissolved into the worst of Derek’s
life. Middle school sucks, German class sucks, Susie Richards
sucks, everything sucks, he thought to himself as he
limped quietly through the front door.
Creative Writing
Voice Example 1
“I first met Dean not long after my wife and I split up. I had just
gotten over a serious illness that I won’t bother to talk about,
except that it had something to do with the miserably weary splitup and my feeling that everything was dead. With the coming of
Dean Moriarty began the part of my life you could call my life on
the road.”
-Jack Kerouac, On the Road
Creative Writing
Voice Example 2
“Abandon all hope ye who enter here is scrawled in blood red
lettering on the side of the Chemical Bank near the corner of
Eleventh and First and is in print large enough to be seen from
the backseat of the cab as it lurches forward in the traffic leaving
Wall Street and just as Timothy Price notices the words a bus
pulls up, the advertisement for Les Miserables on its side blocking
his view, but Price who is with Pierce & Pierce and twenty-six
doesn’t seem to care because he tells the driver he will give him
five dollars to turn up the radio, “Be My Baby” on WYNN, and
the driver, black, not American, does so.”
-Bret Easton Ellis, American Psycho
Creative Writing
Voice Example 3
“All this happened, more or less. The war parts, anyway, are
pretty much true. One guy I knew really was shot in Dresden for
taking a teapot that wasn’t his. Another guy I knew really did
threaten to have his personal enemies killed by hired gunmen after
the war. And so on. I’ve changed all the names.”
-Kurt Vonnegut, Slaughterhouse-Five
The Maker’s Eye:
Psychological Research
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Psychology - Information
Start out by educating yourself in reviewing prior
research.
An abundance of research is necessary to develop
adequate research questions and formulate ideas.
Psychology - Information
Batson, C. D. and P. A. Schoenrade. 1991a. Measuring religion as quest: I. Validity concerns.
Journal for the Scientific Study of Religion, 30, 416–29.
——. 1991b. Measuring religion as quest: II. Reliability concerns. Journal for the Scientific
Study of Religion, 30, 430–47.
Chase-Lansdale, P.L., Cherlin, A., Kiernan, K. (1995). The Long-Term Effects of Parental
Divorce on the Mental Health of Young Adults: A Developmental Perspective. Child
Development, 66, 1614-1634.
Gallup. (2009). Religion. Retrieved from http://www.gallup.com/poll/1690/religion.aspx#1.
Gorsuch, R.L., McPherson, S.E. (1989). Intrinsic/Extrinsic Measurement: I/E-Revised and
Single-Item Scales. Journal for the Scientific Study of Religion, 28, 348-354.
Hill, R. (2007). Family development in three generations: A longitudinal study of changing
patterns of planning and achievement. New Brunswick, N.J: Transaction Publishers.
Holland, J.C., Kash, K.M., Passik, S., Gronert, M.K., Sison, A., Lederberg, M.,…Fox, B.
(1998).
A Brief Spiritual Beliefs Inventory For Use In Quality of Life Research in LifeThreatening Illness. Psycho-Oncology 7, 460-469.
Mahoney, A., Pargament, K.I. Tarakeshwar, N., & Swank, A.B. (2008). Religion in the Home
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Psychology - Meaning
Once research has been accumulated, it must be sifted
through to find the most effective and relevant studies.
Finding studies most relevant to your research topic
will be most helpful to focus on.
Psychology - Meaning
Batson, C. D. and P. A. Schoenrade. 1991a. Measuring religion as quest: I. Validity concerns.
Journal for the Scientific Study of Religion, 30, 416–29.
——. 1991b. Measuring religion as quest: II. Reliability concerns. Journal for the Scientific
Study of Religion, 30, 430–47.
Gallup. (2009). Religion. Retrieved from http://www.gallup.com/poll/1690/religion.aspx#1.
Hill, R. (2007). Family development in three generations: A longitudinal study of changing
patterns of planning and achievement. New Brunswick, N.J: Transaction Publishers.
Mahoney, A., Pargament, K.I. Tarakeshwar, N., & Swank, A.B. (2008). Religion in the Home
in
the 1980s and 1990s: A Meta-Analytic Review and Conceptual Analysis of Links
Between Religion, Marriage, and Parenting. Psychology of Religion and Spirituality,
S, 63-101.
Psychology - Audience
The researcher must look at the audience who him or
her is presenting to and tailor research accordingly
Goals for research are often aligned with the journals
research will be submitted to:
Counseling
Cognitive
Social
Perceptual
Etc.
Psychology - Form
How will your study be conducted?
Experiment
Survey
Observation
The type of research might dictate for what purpose
you are researching for and what your results will mean
Correlation ≠ Causation
Psychology - Structure
Structure of a Research Paper
Abstract
Introduction
Method
Results
Discussion
References
Appendix
Psychology - Development
Provide results and data from your experiment
What was accomplished? What was learned? What can
be further accomplished?
Psychology - Dimension
Revisions to add & subtract data & irrelevant
information.
Multiple-trials to validate data.
Confounding variables.
Psychology - Voice
Instead of working toward having a certain voice for a
research paper, authors should work away from it.
Less creativity and more readability & understanding is
better.
The Maker’s Eye:
Teaching
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Teaching - Information
Pick topic for lesson plan
Decide the skill/content area
Age group targeted
Decide on number of children in group
Decide on space and materials needed
Teaching - Meaning
What will the children experience during the activity
What are the different skills they will acquire during
the activity
Teaching - Audience
Age group being targeted
The cognitive level of the age group targeted
Teaching - Form
Figure out why the lesson being taught is worthwhile
Teaching – Structure & Development
Beginning of Lesson
Transition
Intro into lesson
During Part of Lesson
What will the children do
What will teachers do/ interactions
What are they learning
End of Lesson
Conclusion
Transition out of lesson
Clean-up
Teaching - Dimension
Figure out developmental objectives
Social/Emotional
Language
Cognitive
Physical
Adaptive
How will individual needs be met
Special needs
Easy/Hard
Teaching - Voice
What are potential problems?
How can activity be extended?
The Maker’s Eye
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The Maker’s Eye
Video Example
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Questions?
Works Cited
Murray, Donald M. “The Maker’s Eye: Revising Your
Own Manuscripts.” Language Awareness. 10th ed. Ed.
Paul Escholz, et al. New York: Bedford / St.
Martin’s, 2009. 161-165. Print