Transcript Writing

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Take a packet from the side shelf.
Read each of the examples of yesterday’s writing assignment. (All have
some good elements 2 have large problems.)
Divide them into 2 categories: Mr. Sorochak’s examples of what to do, and
Mr. Sorochak’s examples of paragraph which need revision.
Find at least 2 specific elements/sentences of “to do’s” .
Find at least 2 specific elements which need revision.
Thesis: Due to the disobeyance of the rules stated in
“Deep Survival” the man from “To Build a Fire” becomes
predictable.
One very important rule to surviving is to stay calm and
levelheaded. When you become stressed and freak out
you make stupid unrational decisions. In To Build a Fire
the man does a great job of staying calm. In the story it
says “the strange and weirdness of it all made no
impression on the man.” This shows he stays calm and
blocks out the cold and keeps going. Staying calm is one
of the most important rules and the man does it very well
throughout the story.
Thesis: The ending of “To Build a Fire” was
predictable because, there are many rules from,
“Deep Survival” that he doesn’t follow.
The ending of “To Build a Fire was predictable
because there are many rules from “Deep Survival
that the man didn’t follow. During “To Build a Fire”
in stead of giving up he keeps persevering to build a
fire. He doesn’t freak out or let fear over rule him.
Two important rules from the story “from Deep
Survival.”
Thesis: Due to the disobeyance of the rules stated
in “Deep Survival” the man from “To Build a Fire”
becomes predictable.
Believing you will succeed is one that the man did
for a while but then he stopped believing. “A good
idea, he thought, to sleep off death.” (94) At this
point the man just gave up. He stopped believing
that he’ll make it tot the camp where the boys are
at. If he didn’t go to sleep he may have done more
in trying to survive.
After looking into “Deep Survival” we determined
that his death wasn’t predictable.
“But it didn’t matter much, after all. What were
frosted cheeks? A bit painful that was all; they were
never serious.” The man had forgotten about his
frosted cheeks by thinking if wasn’t a big deal. He
“put away the pain” as stated in “Deep Survival”. As
a survivor, you need to manage the pain well. He
wasn’t predictable because he thought he could
survive, he came across as strong.