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月考试卷分析
情景作文
Lead in：
Statistic analysis of situational writing
高三4班英语情景作文数据分析
16
14
12
10
8
6
4
2
0
系列1
五档文
四档文6-11
四档文6-11
三档文12-14 二档文15-17 一档文18-20
三档文12-14
Lead in：
Statistic analysis of situational writing
高三六班英语情景作文数据分析
16
14
12
10
8
6
4
2
0
系列1
五档文
四档文6-11
四档文6-11
三档文12-14 二档文15-17 一档文18-20
三档文12-14
Activity1：understand the writing
standard.
Step 1: Read the two passages and
grade them according to the
standard individually.
Step 2: Share results and reasons
for the samples in pairs.
Step 3: Discuss the possible grades
of each passage in class.
Evaluate your writing according to given
standard and grade it.
情景作文 第一档
第二档
18分－20分 15分－
17分
总体要求
第三档
12分－14
分
第四档
6分－11分
第五档
1分－5
分
0分
完全达到
了预期的
写作目的。
达到了 基本达到
未恰当完
预期的 了预期的
成试题规
写作目 写作目的。 定的任务。
的。
未完成 未能传达
试题规 任何信息。
定的任
务。
覆盖了所
有内容要点
覆盖了
所有内
容要
点；
明显遗
漏主要
内容；
内容
覆盖了内
容要点；
漏掉或未
描述清楚
主要内
容；
所写内容
与要求无
关。
Evaluate your writing according to given
standard and grade it.
情景作文
句式,词
汇
第一档
18分－20
分
第二档
15分－17
分
第三档
12分－14
分
第四档
6分－11分
第五档
1分－5分
运用了多
样的句式
和丰富的
词汇;
运用的句
式和词汇
能满足任
务要求；
运用的句
式和词汇
基本满足
任务要
求；
所用句式和
词汇有限；
句式单调、词
汇贫乏；
0分
Evaluate your writing according to given
standard and grade it.
情景作文 第一档
18分－20
分
语法
第二档
15分－17
分
语法或用 语法和用
词方面有 词基本准
个别错
确，少许
误，但为 错误主要
尽可能表 为尽可能
达丰富的 表达丰富
内容所致； 的内容所
体
致；
现了较强
的语言运
用能力;
第三档
12分－14
分
第四档
6分－11
分
语法和用 语法或用
词方面有 词方面的
一些错误， 错误影响
但不影响 了对所写
理解。
内容的理
解。
第五档
1分－5分
语法或用词方面
误较多，严重影
响了对所写内容
的理解。
0分
Evaluate your writing according to given
standard and grade it.
情景作文 第一档
18分－20分
第二档
15分－17
分
结构
使用了简
单的语句
间连接成
分，所写
内容连贯。
有效地使用了
语句间的连接
成分，所写内
容连贯、结构
紧凑。
第三档
12分
－14
分
第四档 第五档
6分－11
1分
分
－5
分
0分
Evaluation form
Passage A
要点
全
语言
正确
四幅图
情景信息
时态
句式
词汇
逻辑&连贯
Passage B
Find out the main information of each picture
and write down the Chinese or English in the
form.
Content
Chinese
What Picture1 去商店买手机
给奶奶
to do
Picture2 送手机，教奶
奶使用手机
English
Go to a store, buy
a
phone
for
grandma
Give it to her,teach
her how to use it
Picture3 奶奶学会后，自
Call sb.
己打电话给别人
Picture4 告诉邻居会用
手机了；大家
夸奖我
tell the neighbors,
praise me
Activity1：understand the writing standard.
A篇 四档文 7分
During winter vacation, I spent my
lucky money on a special gift for Grandma.
I was go to a phone shop and buy a phone
for my grandma. I return home and I
teached my grandma how used it. She
was very happiness. My father often calls
her. When he walked on the street, she
telled this for her neighbors. I’m happy
too.
基本要点有，图3要点不当.无细节支撑,错误多
Activity1：understand the writing standard.
B篇
三档文, 12分
During winter vacation, I spent my lucky
money on a special gift for Grandma. I buyed a
cell-phone for her. The keyboard of the cellphone is so big that my grandma can use it
clearly. I hoped she can use it to call me. When
I taught her how to use it, she was delight .She
used it calling to my mom and say she has a
best grandson. When she taked the phone to go
to the park, she admired that I’m very good to
teach her how to use phone with neighbors.
要点基本齐全,但表达平淡无新意、结构略显松
散且不够流畅。词尤其是短语使用不当或缺乏,
句式单一,语言错误不影响图片信息的传达.
Evaluation form
Passage A
(7分,不及格)
要点
全
语言
正确
四幅图
情景信息
时态
句式
词汇
逻辑&连贯
Passage C
(12分, 及格)
×
×
×
×
×
用基本正确的语言描述要点,
要点齐全,才能达到及格水平.
×
×
×
×
Common mistakes in the situational writing
错误1：be+do/did
错误2. 不熟悉不规则动词过去式形式
错误3: 用词不当, 无法准确传达信息.
错误4:中文式思维造成句型错误.
错误5: 人称不对,逻辑不合理.
Activity1：Find out the mistakes
Underline the mistakes
in the two samples
Activity1：Find out the mistakes
Check the result and
number them in the
two samples
Activity1： Find out the mistakes
A篇 四档文 7分
During winter vacation, I spent my
lucky money on a special gift for Grandma.
I ① was go to a phone shop and ② buy a
phone for my grandma. I ③ return home
and I ④ teached my grandma ⑤ how used
it. She was very ⑥ happiness. ⑦ My father
often calls her. When he walked on the
street, she ⑧ telled this for her neighbors.
⑨ I’m happy too.
Activity1： Find out the mistakes
B篇
三档文, 12分
During winter vacation, I spent my lucky
money on a special gift for Grandma. ⑩ I buyed a
cell-phone for her. The keyboard of the cellphone is so big that my grandma can ⑾ use it
clearly. I hoped she can use it to call me. When I
taught her how to use it, she was ⑿delight .She
used it ⒀calling to my mom and ⒁say she has a
best grandson. When she ⒂taked the phone to
go to the park, she⒃ admired that I’m very good
to teach her how to use phone with neighbors.
Activity2：Correct &Classify the mistakes
一. 不规则动词过去式错误/时态错误
④⑧⑩⒁⒂
二. 词语使用错误
三. 句式错误
②③⑨
⑥⑾⑿
⑤⒀
四. 漏掉或未描述清楚主要内容
①
⑦ ⒃
Activity3：Correct the mistakes
错误1：不规则动词过去式拼写错误
策略：
按拼写规律分类 熟记不规则动词形式
i变a
begin began let
give gave
sing sang
sit
ought
不变
sat
let
bring brought teach taught
hurt hurt buy
hit
hit
put
put
drink drank beat beat
sink sank
aught
bought
think thought
tell told told
take took taken
Say said said
Activity3：Correct the mistakes
错误2：词语使用不恰当
策略： 熟记写作常用词的词义和词性
利用词块记忆减少词语搭配错误
A 选词错误（词义）
admire
B词性使用错误
Happiness,
delight
use,
C词语搭配错误
Activity3：Correct the mistakes
错误3：句式英语错误
I ①went
was go to a phone shop and buy a phone for my
grandma.
？
行为动词的基本句型：
主语+行为动词
错误原因：逐字翻译句子 造成中式英语
策略：1.使用五个基本句型
2.套用固定的句式
Some useful structures
It is/ was … who…
It is a good idea to do sth.
It is important to do sth.
It takes sb. some time to do sth.
I think that…
I believe that…
The reason why…is that…
Activity3：Correct the mistakes
错误4：落掉或未描述清楚要点
原因： 没有忠实于原图
Picture3
My father often calls her.
合理的推理
Grandma learned carefully and wanted
to have a try.
With my help, she successfully
called her friend.
When she taked the phone to go to the park,
she admired that I’m very good to teach her
how to use phone with neighbors.
That afternoon Grandma proudly told the neighbors that she
could make calls with the new phone I bought her. They all
praised how thoughtful I was.
Activity3：Correct the mistakes
错误4：漏掉或未描述清楚要点
原因： 没有忠实于原文
策略: 1 忠实于原图 描述图中具体信息
2 根据所描述的具体的信息进行合理的归纳
和推理
Activity4：
Correct the mistakes
in your own passage
Possible version
During winter vacation, I spent my lucky
money on a special gift for Grandma. One
Friday afternoon, I went to a cell phone store
and chose a large button phone specially
designed for seniors. I gave it to Grandma
when I came to visit her at the weekend. Upon
receiving the phone, Grandma was very happy
and eager to learn how to use it. I patiently
explained all the important functions she
needed. Grandma learned carefully and
wanted to have a try. With my help, she
successfully called her friend. That afternoon
Grandma proudly told the neighbors that she
could make calls with the new phone I bought
Suggestion:
审题细致要点全，
忠实原文逻辑连，
中式英语要避免，
词汇搭配要记全，
时态拼写少出错，
作文及格不再难。