Editing & Revising

Night Rhetorical Analysis Paper Top Ten Noticeable Errors: 1) Too informal; avoid “you” 2) Cite page numbers after the quote, not as part of the sentence 3) Underline novel titles, not in quotation marks 4) Too repetitive of word choices 5) Choose synonyms for common words (a lot) 6) Show, don’t tell!

7) Write out number below ten 8) Use the author’s last name when referencing, not his first 9) Avoid: “author did a great job…” 10) Comma usage To do: 1) Each group has a mixture of scores: high, medium & low 2) Read highest score aloud; others jot down notes focusing on what they hear 3) Discuss 4) Pass & read papers, editing through each time 5) Revisions due Friday

Editing & Revising

Favorite Mistake Recall & Reflect Paper Top Ten Noticeable Errors: 1) Need more detail & description 2) More reflecting on the experience 3) Add dialogue 4) Avoid cliches 5) Too repetitive of word choices 6) Too repetitive of sentence structures 7) Focus on the climatic moment 8) Subject-verb agreements 9) Spelling!!!!!!

10) Informal vs. formal: find a balance To do: 1) Exchange papers with another 2) Read & edit 3) Discuss with your partner how to improve 4) Final draft due on Wednesday

Rhetorical Modes: Process Analysis

• • • • What Process Analysis Does: Gives instructions on how to do something Describes how something was done Presents info in chronological order Common in science & technology fields • • • • •

How to Write a PA:

Decide overall purpose: to inform or to instruct State purpose in a clear thesis Organize the sequence of steps logically Explain everything!!!!

Use transitional words

Rhetorical Modes: Process Analysis

READ: “Weighed Down By Too Much Cash” – Rick Reilly (SI)

Fact: 60% of former pro basketball players end up filing bankruptcy within five years of leaving the NBA, despite the fact that they once earned millions of dollars in their careers.

• Using sarcasm, Rick Reilly “informs” NBA rookies how in ten easy steps, they, too, can squander the millions of dollars they are about to earn in their new basketball careers.

To Do:

1) Annotate the text, focusing on Reilly SYTLE & how he chooses to format the piece.

2) Answer the question: why is this a process analysis piece?

3) Generate a list of topics (3 -5) that you could use to emulate this piece

Rhetorical Modes: Process Analysis

Discuss:

1) Annotate the text, focusing on Reilly SYTLE & how he chooses to format the piece.

2) Answer the question: why is this a process analysis piece?

3) Generate a list of topics (3 -5) that you could use to emulate this piece

Rhetorical Modes: Process Analysis

Your Assignment:

1) With a partner, choose one topic from the generated list 2) Use the Reilly template & create your own “How-To” 3) Share w/class & submit

Your Homework:

1) Read “Hunting Octopus in The Gilbert Islands” (p. 287 -290) 2) Answer “The Strategies” 1-5

Future Work:

1) Presidential Debates…

Rhetorical Modes: Process Analysis

“Unwritten Rules” • Read Sherman Alexie Example • Read Baseball example • Create own with a partner; following the SAME template!