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Unit 1 Section A
Personal Writing
45 minutes
(p2-14)
The Assessment
Objectives (p2)
1. Writing clearly, effectively and
imaginatively to engage the reader
2. Using a style that matches vocabulary
to purpose and audience
3. Organising ideas/information
logically into sentences and paragraphs
4. Making use of language and structural
features for effect
5. Using a range of sentence structures as
The type of question
Candidates will be asked to produce a
single piece of writing on a given subject.
They will be required to write in one of a
variety of forms:
•a magazine article for your school
magazine
•a letter to a friend or a local newspaper
•a speech or presentation to other pupils,
or,
Writing – 24 marks
• AO3 (i) and (ii) –
structure/development
16 marks
• AO3 (iii) – use of sentences and
accuracy spelling, punctuation and
grammar
8 marks
A typical task
(p4)
Form: a speech
•You have been asked to make a
speech to your classmates on
your favourite possession.
Audience: classmates
Purpose: to describe
Topics
• Your favourite ….
(teacher/
possession/
holiday, etc)
• Your worst ever
holiday
• A memorable
journey
• Your closest
friend
Section A – Personal Writing
• 45 minutes
• 10 mins – planning
your response to the
task
• 25-30 mins – writing
your response
• 5 mins – checking your
work
Writing Techniques (p5+6)
• Rhetorical
Questions
• Rapport
• Emotive
Language
• Indirect
involvement
• Hyperbole
• Assertive
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Repetition
Alliteration
Statistics
Humour
Personal
Anecdote
• Tone
• Effective opening
• Strong
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Example Openings (+
Conclusions)
An unusual
detail: “Manitoba in Canada has
p38-39
the largest seasonal congregation of garter
snakes in the world!”
• A strong statement: “Cigarettes are the
number one cause of lung cancer in the UK!”
• A quotation: “Shakespeare said, ‘All the
world’s a stage ….’”
• An anecdote: An anecdote can provide an
amusing and attention- grabbing opening if it is
short and to the point.
Example Openings (+
Conclusions)
• A statistic or fact: “There are over 2.7
billion searches on Google each month.”
• A question: “Have you ever considered
how many books we would have read if it
were not for television and the Internet?”
• An exaggeration or outrageous
statement: “The whole world watched as
the comet flew overhead.”
Good Opening statements
Topic: “The worst day of my life”:
X
• I am going to write about the worst day
in my life.
• I’m sure you all have heard of the
expression “getting out of the wrong
side of the bed in the morning”.
• The piercing 6:30 alarm jarred me out of
Task - p8 + 9
• 3 examples of writing –
different approaches to
personal writing task
A lively start that addresses the
reader directly - ‘you’.
So you’re going on holiday to KL! It’s a brilliant place, a real mix
of Malay, Chinese and Indian culture. There’s so much going on
that you won’t want to go to bed at night. Now you’re probably
thinking, ‘I hope she’s not going to bore me writing some tedious
travel guide.’ Well I’m not. You’ll find your own way, but here are a
few suggestions about things that you can say or do.
Your first adventure will be negotiating the airport. I don’t like it,
even if it is very modern and impressive. I went there when it was
first built and got lost it was so big. Every time I tried to find our
departure lounge I ended up wandering into a different shop.
Apparently the airport was designed so that people could be
channelled into retail outlets to buy more goodies.
Anyway, if you manage to get through the airport, you’ll need to
get a taxi into the city centre, which (I say should) will take about
an hour. Have you been to the Far East before? If you haven’t,
the traffic might come as a shock. Sometimes it gets gridlocked for
hours on end and nothing moves except the meter on the taxi.
If you’re lucky, though, you’ll end up in the middle of town in time to
see some of the city before dark. There are so many things to
do, like going to Petronas Towers, visiting the National Museum,
Unusual choice of
location grabs the
reader’s attention
One of my favourite places is the bus shelter outside
school. Most people would not think a bus shelter is
very interesting, and would expect a favourite place to
be somewhere exotic. I suppose the main reason I
like it so much – at least in the winter, is because it is
one of the few places anyone can keep dry and
reasonably warm on a main road when you need to
get off the school premises at lunchtime. If you think a
bus shelter is an odd place to choose, there are
others who seem to share my odd choice. The other
day for instance, the shelter was packed full of people
chatting and nobody got any of the buses that pulled
up. You’ll see now that it is not the décor or the
architecture that makes the shelter a favourite place;
it’s the company and the social diary. Yesterday I
met up with three of my closest friends who I hadn’t
seen for three days. We solved the world’s
metaphor
Short sentence
for effect
simile
Late November. The centre of the city lies
still as a tomb, grey in the cold earth. Silent
buildings are gravestones to the living
cemetery beneath. A chill wind blows the hair
across my face. Dust and dirt swirl from the
gutter and in a tin can rattles down the
pavement, its half-consumed contents
dribbling stickily behind. A cheeseburger
carton limps unwillingly along before lodging
beneath a bench. The smell of stale onions
lingers from an abandoned hot dog stand, and
beside me, in the wide shop door, a sign of
life. A cardboard box shifts in the gloom and a
dark shape shuffles. A cupped grey hand
extends, yet I move away ashamed.
Adjectives build
up a misty,
desolate feeling
Adverbs create
‘sleazy’
impression
personification
Strong, well-chosen
verbs in the present
tense
alliteration
onomatopoeia
Connectives (p10)
• Make writing more fluent by linking
information, ideas and events and
showing the relationship between them.
• Act as signposts for the reader.
• Without connectives, writing reads like a
list.
• Learn them and use them in your
Top Answer (p12)
• Read the response
I hated that place. I hated everything about it.
Before I went to hospital I was terrified, and
when I was there I was traumatised. I feared
every step that walked past my door, fearing it
was my surgeon.
My surgeon was a plump and stumpy man,
who in my opinion had a heart of stone. He
wore black framed glasses that made his eyes
look like pin pricks, and his lips were
constantly pursed. The day he told me I
needed life-threatening surgery was routine for
him, but tore my world apart. This lack of
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Paragraphing
Remember P.E.E:
Paragraphing
Equals
Excellence
Paragraphing
REMEMBER TIPTOP
When you skip to a new time
When you skip to a new place
When you start in on a new topic
When a new person begins to speak
Plan
Subject: ____________________
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Flow Chart
Subject:
Spider Diagram/Mind Map
Topic
Planning
Remember P.E.E:
Planning
Equals
Excellence
Ending
If a student runs out of time:
•Do not end writing tasks with a series
of bullet points.
•If they have only a couple of minutes
left they should write a concluding
paragraph.
Exemplar Responses