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Giving evidence
Achieving Level 5
Providing evidence
in your writing
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It is crucial
that you PEE
in your writing
to make it as
accurate as
possible.
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But what is the
evidence?
The evidence you need to use is
anything from the text. If you make a
point then you need to refer back to
the text to show where you’re getting
your ideas from and that you’re not
just making them up.
Look at the text on the next slide from
Act 1, Scene 2. Find the phrases which
show what Ariel will do for Prospero.
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Ariel
All hail, great master! Grave sir, hail! I come
To answer thy best pleasure – be’t to fly,
To swim, to dive into the fire, to ride
On the curled clouds. To thy strong bidding task
Ariel and all his quality.
You have thirty seconds.
Finding the evidence is one thing - but how do we write it?
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This means taking what is said in
the text and putting it into your
own words. You do need to make
sure that you keep the meaning
the same.
Paraphrasing
Hast thou, spirit,
Performed to point the tempest that I bade thee?
becomes
Prospero asks Ariel whether the spirit has aimed the
tempest as was instructed.
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Your turn …
Not a hair perished:
On their sustaining garments not a blemish,
But fresher than before.
becomes
Ariel reports to Prospero that, despite the tempest that they endured, all the
crew and passengers are safe with not even a hair being damaged on their
heads. The only change to them is that they are cleaner after their good wash!
Remember that the more information you include, the more you
are showing that you understand the text.
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Quoting
This means taking the exact words that are used
in the text. You must always use quotation marks
(single speech marks). You must make sure that
the sentence still makes sense.
Ariel describes how the tempest affected the passengers of the
ship. They all ‘plunged in the foaming brine’; the King’s son,
Ferdinand, was ‘the first man that leaped’ and as he jumped he
shouted, ‘Hell is empty, And all the devils are here!’
The quotations are only short but make your point and link
what you say back to the text. You do not have to include
whole lines but should choose selected phrases.
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Your turn …
Look at the extract below: Act 1, Scene 2, lines 226-229.
Write a sentence, including quotations, which explains
where Ariel has left the ship after the storm.
‘Safely in the harbour
Is the King’s ship. In the deep nook, where once
Thou call’dst me up at midnight to fetch dew
From the still-vexed Bermudas, there she’s hid.’
Ariel has left the ship, with its crew locked inside, ‘safely in
the harbour’. Ariel knew about this ‘deep nook’ as Prospero
had, in the past, sent the spirit there to ‘fetch dew’.
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Long quotations
Sometimes your quotation will not fit into
the sentence. This is usually true if you
want to use a longer quotation.
If this is the case, you will put the quotation on a new line. Do try to
avoid this as you don’t very often need to include the whole quotation.
In Act 1, Scene 2, Prospero reminds Ariel of the time the spirit was trapped:
Thy groans
Did make wolves howl, and penetrate the breasts
Of ever-angry bears. It was a torment
To lay upon the damned …
He reminds the spirit that he freed her from this misery and that, in return,
she should do his bidding without question.
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Putting it all
together
You’ve now looked at various extracts from
the play and used the different ways of
giving evidence.
If you want to achieve a Level 5 or higher in
this year’s SATs, it is crucial that you
remember to include quotations in your
answers.
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