Transcript The alligator eats. The green alligator eats. The green alligator eats

英文作文教學與批閱
新竹女中
應惠蕙
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Content新鮮
Structure正確
Diction難度提升
Pattern多變化
句子加長(一)
The alligator eats.
The green alligator eats.
The green alligator eats quickly.
The green alligator eats quickly in the
pool.
When: The green alligator eats quickly in the
pool at 9:00 A.M.
The green alligator eats quickly in the
Why:
pool at 9:00 A.M. because he is
hungry.
Who:
What:
How:
Where:
句子加長(二)
• + 對等連接詞 Mark was excited but nervous.
• + 關係子句 Mark was invited by Tracy to sit
at her table, where they shared a pot of coffee.
• + 同位語 Mark, an extremely shy person
around girls, was invited by Tracy to sit at her
table, where they shared a pot of coffee.
句子加長(三)
• + 副詞子句 After Mark had coffee with Tracy,
he decided to ask her out for a date.
• + 分詞片語 Mark, having butterflies in his
stomach, did not know what to say.
• + 獨立分詞片語 His eyes closed, Mark was
thinking about Tracy.
• Telescopic
Translation
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背佳句
comfortable, prosperous jobs
matching rival
• 百寶書: sentence patterns 1, 2, 3
• 句型 + 時事*
• 佳作 1
寫作的基本概念
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paragraph punch
paragraph writing exercise
OWL
普渡大學線上寫作教室
與課文相關的練習 (一)
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worksheets 1, 2, 3, 4
summary 1, 2, 3
prediction*
letter of gratitude/apology
change point of view B3U10
picture books 1, 2, 3, 4, 5
comic strips*
video*
學生作品*
利用課本動詞或句型
與課文相關的練習 (二)
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The Difficulty I Have Ever Encountered
Describe a nervous situation
My Favorite Corner of the Campus*
Working Holiday
The Person I Admire Most
分析學測作文題目
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題型
文體: Narration, Description
字數
評分標準
記敘文(Narration)
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Beginning, Middle, End
Who? When? Where? What? How? Why?
5 senses: see, hear, feel, smell, taste
theme
flashback
Quotation Marks
Imagery
常見的題目
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A Memorable Event in Your Childhood
An Unforgettable Trip
My Ideal College Life
A Nightmare/Dream
The Thing I Treasured Most
Writing Prompts
描寫文(Description)
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an experience
a person: appearance, personality, action*
a place: clockwise, counterclockwise
a memory
an object
Example
• I grew tired after dinner.
• As I leaned back and rested my head against
the top of the chair, my eyelids began to feel
heavy, and the edges of the empty plate in
front of me blurred with the white tablecloth.
Describing a Person
• general
appearance
• top to down
• clothing
• a general
statement
http://everystockphoto.com/photo.php
?imageId=270544
Example of describing a person
He has a potbelly and a squeaky
voice. His arms and legs are as thin
as sticks. He wears funny-looking red
shorts with big white buttons, and he
has big round black ears and a
pointed nose.
Describing a Place: Gathering Details
• Sensory details
my team running onto the field (sight)
the crack of the bat (hearing)
smooth wooden seats (touch)
hot dogs cooking (smell)
warm, buttery popcorn (taste)
• Factual details
• Figurative details
• Thoughts and feelings
Describing a Place: Organizing details
• Spatial Order
from top to down
from left to right
clockwise/counterclockwise
• Order of Importance
from least important to most important
from most important to least important
Example of describing a place
Located about fifty kilometers off the coast of
Taitung County, Orchid Island is a magical spot set in
the deep blue Pacific Ocean. From the air, the
mountains peak out from the clouds as you approach
the island. As your airplane lands, you can see the
green fields and woods along with the blue water. On
arriving, you can catch sight of fishing and farming
villages. From the mountaintops to the crashing
waves on the rocky beaches, Orchid Island, a
paradise waiting to be discovered, seems frozen in
time.
Another Example
Moist and salty, a chilly breeze blows in across
the swells, bringing with it the pungent smells
of seaweed and fish and making me pull my
jacket a little closer. Sea spray transforms into
fiery prisms as the waves splash against the
shore, catch the last golden rays of sun, and
toss them up like liquid crystals.
http://www.writeshop.com/blog/2010/02/23/choosingvocabulary-to-describe-a-place/
Description Topics
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A Treasured Belonging
My Favorite Book
My Favorite Food
My Ideal College Life
Ten Years from Now
Weather
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one burning hot day
one scorching day
on a freezing cold day
one foggy winter day
one gloomy/dark/cold rainy day
one beautiful sunny day
Color
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ruby red, bloody red
emerald green, jade green
sapphire blue, ocean blue, midnight blue
rosy pink
pitch dark
-colored
as red as blood, as white as snow
emotions
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--> I was delighted with/by/at...
--> I was overjoyed to...
--> I was ecstatic about...
--> I beamed with joy...
--> I was thrilled at...
--> I was on top of the world when...
--> My heart leaped when...
emotions
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--> He lost his temper...
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emotions
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He burst into tears/laughter.
He was green with envy.
He was overwhelmed by grief.
He trembled with fear/rage.
He had butterflies in his stomach.
He was struck dumb with fear.
He was stunned with grief and anger.
He was tongue-tied.
He was like a cat on hot bricks.
看圖寫作的步驟
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narration & description
Who? What? Why? When? Where? How?
5 senses
emotions
patterns: with + O + OC, 分詞構句: Adj, S + V
倒裝句: only when, not until
imagery (like, as...as)
quotation marks
flashback*
message
寫作拿高分的秘訣
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文法正確
合主題
字數至少150字
不要只用簡單句
用一~二個分詞構句
用一個with + O + OC
擅用比喻
加一句引句，但注意標點
convey a message or teach a
lesson
應避免的錯誤
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時態
Every persons was early.
Apple is good for health.
She had his book in his hand.
You eats lunch.
人稱換來換去
Edit Checklist http://jc-schools.net/write/checklist.pdf
Expository
• paragraph punch
• brainstorm*
• genres: giving examples/reasons, sequence,
comparison, cause and effect, problem and
solution, definition
• 歷屆考題*
• 佳作
批改的方式
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A+, A, A-, ...
peer correction*
只改要改的地方
利用評分標準*
討論common errors
列出優點
佳作分享
說明文拿高分的秘訣
• 架構正確
• 有主題句、結論句及轉折詞
• 注意事項*
Q&A