Transcript Writing in Context-Journeys - Year11VCE

Journeys – Thelma and Louise
Ridley Scott, 1991
Topic:
How have the text/s you have studied,
effectively shaped your understanding of the
meaning of journeys?
Find appropriate quotes
Find, and organise, quotes that demonstrate:
A Physical journey:
e.g. a starting point; places along the way; events
that happened along the way; people met along
the way; end point.
A Spiritual journey:
(For both Thelma and Louise)
e.g. changes in personality; power shifts;
Thelma becoming stronger; Louise becoming
weaker; decision making shifts; Louise
becoming stronger again.
Make a plan
Introduction:
1. General info about journeys
2. Your contention
3. Details of text/s
4. Mention main points you will make
Body:
Body paragraph 1
1.
Topic sentence – main point 1
2.
Explanation (of Topic sentence)
3.
Evidence (and quotes)
4.
Link to Topic/next paragraph
*T E E L
*Note:
all Body Paragraphs follow
the same structure
.
Conclusion
NO NEW INFORMATION
1.
2.
3.
Sum up main points (from Topic sentences)
“Mirror” the Intro (General info)
Re-state contention
(not exactly the same words)
Intro
1. General info about journeys; It’s ok to include a “special” quote in the Intro.
2. State your contention – clearly – make sure your contention relates directly to the prompt.
3. Some appropriate details of the text studied; e.g. Title, Director, Date
4. Mention the main points you will be addressing in the Body Paragraphs - 3 main points at least
Body Paragraphs
*Remember T E E L
T Topic sentence. You MUST state what the whole paragraph will be about-(it’s an all encompassing statement)
E Explanation. This is where you explain the Topic sentence and lead into your examples
E Evidence. This is where you include appropriate quotes and paraphrasing
L Link. Link back to the topic – or to the next Body paragraph
All Body Paragraphs will follow the same format
Conclusion
1. Sum up - from the topic sentences
2. “Mirror” some of the things you said in the Introduction – some of the general information
3. Re-state your Contention
1. General info about journeys; e.g. physical;
spiritual; voluntary; “forced”; starting/ending
points; places/people along the way; changes in
direction/plans etc.
It’s ok to include a “special” quote in the Intro.
2. State your contention – clearly – make sure
your contention relates directly to the prompt.
The prompt for this essay is:
How have the text/s you have studied, effectively
shaped your understanding of the meaning of
journeys?
3. Some appropriate details of the text studied;
e.g. Title, Director, Date
(Don’t go overboard – most details will not be
relevant)
4. Mention the main points you will be
addressing in the Body Paragraphs
(Have 3 main points at least – 1 main point per
Body Paragraph, so 3 main points = 3 BPs; 4
main points = 4 BPs)
*Remember T E E L
T Topic sentence. You MUST state what the
whole paragraph will be about
(it’s an all encompassing statement)
E Explanation. This is where you explain the
Topic sentence and lead into your examples
(this is usually general info about the topic,
related (of course) directly to the prompt and
the “Context” of journeys)
E Evidence. This is where you include
appropriate quotes and paraphrasing to support
the main point you are making
(from the Topic sentence)
Try to include at least 1 quote, if not 2
L Link. Link back to the topic – or to the next
Body paragraph
(I prefer a link to the topic)
You can do this by using some of the words in
the prompt and/or some of the general info used
in the Introduction
All Body Paragraphs will
follow the
same format
1. Sum up
You should be able to do this from the
topic sentences of each Body Paragraph
(if you’ve written good ones)
2. “Mirror” some of the things you said in
the Introduction – some of the general
information
(don’t use exactly the same words – but
close enough to be able to see that’s what
you are doing)
3. Re-state your Contention
(remember, this should take into
consideration, and be about, the Prompt)
(don’t use exactly the same words – but close
enough to be able to see that’s what you are
doing)
This is the SAC criteria for this task (the exam criteria is the
same but minus the written explanation criteria):
 Draw on ideas and/or arguments suggested by a chosen
Context to create written texts for a specified audience and
purpose; and to discuss and analyse in writing their
decisions about form, purpose, language, audience and
context.
In order to achieve top marks:
25–30 marks
Skilful shaping of ideas, arguments and
language appropriate to the chosen form,
audience, purpose and context.
 Sophisticated
understanding of complex
ideas and/or arguments relevant to the
chosen Context and presented in selected
text/s; a demonstrated ability to draw on
and develop these in the creation of own
text/s.
 Highly
expressive, fluent and coherent
writing. Use of appropriate metalanguage
to present an insightful, highly expressive
and coherent written explanation of
personal authorial choices. (Written
Explanation)
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