Transcript Day 1 - Bristol VA Public Schools
Day 1
Curious enough, paradise has been viewed as a beautiful garden by poets and storytellers in different ages and cultures.
The word paradise itself comes from an old persian word meaning “a walled pleasure park." Use of underlining or italics with words used as words Capitalization of proper adjective Use of adverb to modify adverb Use of active voice to improve style
Curiously
Day 1
enough, poets and storytellers in different ages and cultures have viewed paradise as a beautiful garden.
Use of active voice to improve style Use of adverb to modify adverb The word
paradise
pleasure park.” itself comes from an old Persian word meaning “a walled Use of underlining or italics with words used as words Capitalization of proper adjective
Day 2
John Milton based his epic poem Paradise Lost on the biblical story of Adam and Eve and the Garden of Eden.
Milton describes Eden like it was a formal garden of a wealthy seventeenth century landowner.
Use of hyphen in compound adjective Correct subordinating conjunction
as if
Use of underlining or italics with title of epic poem Use of verb in the subjunctive mood
Day 2
John Milton based his epic poem Paradise Lost on the biblical story of Adam and Eve and the Garden of Eden. Use of underlining or italics with title of epic poem Milton describes Eden as if it were a formal garden of a wealthy seventeenth century landowner. Use of verb in the subjunctive mood Correct subordinating conjunction
as if
Use of hyphen in compound adjective
Day 3
In Greek myths the garden of the Hesperides where Atlas’s daughters lived was paradise. Central to this here garden was a tree with golden branchs and fruit, guarded fiercely by the inhabitants of the place.
Correct formation of plural noun Eliminating
here
after a demonstrative adjective Use of commas with nonrestrictive clause
Day 3
In Greek myths the garden of the Hesperides, where Atlas’s daughters lived, was paradise. Use of commas with nonrestrictive clause
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here Central to this garden was a tree with golden branches and fruit, guarded fiercely by the inhabitants of the place. Eliminating here after a demonstrative adjective Correct formation of plural noun
Day 4
Every culture has their own name for paradise, and neither evil nor sadness are ever found there. When India becomes paradise according to some Buddhists it will effortlessly yield an abundance of fruits and flowers.
Use of commas with interrupter Pronoun agreement with antecedent Subject and verb agreement
Day 4
Every culture has its own name for paradise, and neither evil nor sadness is ever found there. Subject and verb agreement Pronoun agreement with antecedent When India becomes paradise, according to some Buddhists, it will effortlessly yield an abundance of fruits and flowers.
Use of commas with interrupter
Day 5
The long-lost garden paradise of some African tribes include the following, ample food, leisure time, and harmony with animals. To find a well-hidden place called “the land without evil”, the guarani tribe of South America conducts frequent trips to nearby territories. Capitalization of proper adjective Correct placement of comma with quotation marks Correct use of colon before a list Subject and verb agreement
Day 5
The long-lost garden paradise of some African tribes includes the following: ample food, leisure time, and harmony with animals. Correct use of colon before a list Subject and verb agreement To find a well-hidden place called “the land without evil ,” the Guarani tribe of South America conducts frequent trips to nearby territories. Correct placement of comma with quotation marks Capitalization of proper adjective