Differences between a C and a D grade

AQA Literature exam

Differences between a C and a D

 17-20    

some focus

on the task Explained responses Range of comments supporting details  Awareness of meaning/ feelings/ attitudes/ idea notification of effects of devices / language Selection of relevant material for comparison Structured comments on similarities/ differences   21- 24 marks Sustained response to the task   support answers Effective comment on meanings Explanations of how effects devices / language are achieved   material Sustained focus on similarities and differences

Sample essays

 Read these sample essays and think about the writing shown.  What grade are the pieces? C or a D?  What do you think are the strengths of each pieces?  Think about what the examiner is looking for.

Essay questions

 How do Seamus Heaney and Gillian Clarke explore family and relationships within in their poetry?

Sample essays

 ‘Digging’ by Seamus Heaney is about his memory of his father and grandfather. The poem shows that Heaney has great respect for his father and grandfather. He has not followed the family tradition of farming and he therefore admires his father and grandfather because they could do something he couldn’t. His admiration is shown where he writes ‘but I’ve no spade to follow men like them.’ The way that he has written ‘men like them’, clearly shows his great respect for them.

Sample essays

Seamus Heaney wrote the story ‘Digging’ Heaney describes his respect and regret for his father and grandfather. Digging uses similes to emphasises words for example ‘snug as a gun’. Digging does not have a regular rhyme schemes.

The stanzas are of regular length and enjambment is used. Digging has an effective ending and it links with the first stanzas. I’ll dig with it is symbolic and creates a good ending.

Compare how attitudes towards other people are shown in four poems you have studied.

Direct opening  Personal ideas  ‘Digging’ by Seamus Heaney is about his memory of his father and grandfather. The poem shows that Heaney has great respect for his father and grandfather. He has not followed the family tradition of farming and he therefore respects his father and grandfather because they could do something he couldn’t. His admiration is shown where he writes ‘but I’ve no spade to follow men like them.’ The way that he has written ‘men like them’, clearly shows his great respect for them. Effective use of detail to support answers Clear, quick and focused analysis P E E = C grade skill

Sample essays

Wrong –  this will cost marks Clear ideas  Seamus Heaney wrote the story ‘Digging’. Heaney describes his respect and regret for his father and grandfather. Digging uses similes to emphasises words for example ‘snug as a gun’. Digging does not have a regular rhyme schemes.

The stanzas are of regular length and enjambment is used. Digging has an effective ending and it links with the first stanzas. ‘I’ll dig with it’ is symbolic and creates a good ending. Why? What does this show or represent? EXPLAIN your point to get the marks. Not helpful and dull – make a point.

Sample essay - Gillian Clarke

In ‘Catrin’, Clarke uses metaphorical language to emphasise her passion for the subject. ‘Red rope of love’ creates powerful image of an umbilical cord. Catrin does not have a rhyming scheme and consist of two stanzas. Clarke also uses harsh words for example ‘fierce confrontation’ emphasis her feelings with harsh sounding letters and a symbolic meaning. She uses alliteration to emphasise her angry feelings ‘coloured them clean’

Sample essay - Gillian Clarke

‘ Catrin’, Clarke uses metaphorical language. ‘Red rope of love’ is powerful. There is not a rhyming scheme but there are two stanzas. Clarke uses harsh words. She has symbolic meanings. She uses alliteration to emphasise her angry feelings ‘coloured them clean’.

Sample essay - Gillian Clarke Babysitting

Clarke reveals in ‘Babysitting’ that she has a negative attitude towards the child. This is shown when she writes: ‘she will shout her hot midnight rage, her nose with stream disgustingly’. The negative language impacts on the reader and helps to justify Clarke’s distaste. The baby in Babysitting is not Clarke’s baby so she does not therefore bond with it. At the beginning of the poem Clarke explains that ‘the baby is perfectly acceptable’ but her language is ambivalent and shows how distant she is from the baby because it is not hers. At the end of the poem, Clarke says ‘it will not come, it will not come’, this is referring to milk as it is not her child but also it is referring to love – she cannot love this child. The repetition emphasises the finality and sadness of it all.

Sample essay - Gillian Clarke

Clear, quick and focused analysis Make a point here – don’t just list features In ‘Catrin’, Clarke uses metaphorical language to emphasise her passion for the subject. ‘Red rope of love’ creates powerful image of an umbilical cord. Catrin does not have a rhyming scheme and consist of two stanzas. Clarke also uses words that sound violent, for example ‘fierce confrontation’ emphasis her feelings with harsh sounding letters and a symbolic meaning. She uses alliteration to emphasise her angry feelings ‘coloured them clean’ P E Need to expand key point P E E = C grade skill

Sample essay - Gillian Clarke

Why? What does this show or represent? EXPLAIN your point to get the marks. Why? Add in your ideas. ‘ Catrin’, Clarke uses metaphorical language. ‘Red rope of love’ is powerful. There is not a rhyming scheme but there are two stanzas. Clarke uses harsh words. She has symbolic meanings. She uses alliteration to emphasise her angry feelings ‘coloured them clean’.

This is better as it is trying to analyse an effect and the impact on the reader. Not helpful and dull – make a point explaining the effect on readers

Overall, this reads like a list of features not an analysis of the poem and will not achieve a C

Sample essay - Gillian Clarke Babysitting

Direct and focused analysis Effective use of detail to support answers Overall, a sustained response to the task Clarke reveals in ‘Babysitting’ that she has a negative attitude towards the child. This is shown when she writes: ‘she will shout her hot midnight rage, her nose with stream disgustingly’. The negative language impacts on the reader and helps to justify Clarke’s distaste. The baby in Babysitting is not Clarke’s baby so she does not therefore bond with it. At the beginning of the poem Clarke explains that ‘the baby is perfectly acceptable’ but her language is ambivalent and shows how distant she is from the baby because it is not hers. At the end of the poem, Clarke says ‘it will not come, it will not come’, this is referring to milk as it is not her child but also it is referring to love – she cannot love this child. The repetition emphasises the finality and sadness of it all. achieved P E E = C grade and higher skill

Explanations

of how effects devices / language are

Conclusions?

 Don’t just retell  Think about the effect and WHY the poet has done this or achieved the effect.  Consider choice of language – and what the effect is on the reader  Add in thoughtful detail – your ideas not just a list of points  Impress the examiner with YOUR ideas – not the teacher’s notes.

Revision

 Practice timed essay – 40 min quick plan and have a go  Read over your work – are you just mindlessly listing all the features? = this will

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achieve a D or lower  Read over your work – are you drawing together ideas and making thoughtful comments? = this will help you gain a C or higher  Use technical terms and the right words – but think about the effect – why did the poet choose to use those terms?