Transcript Sentences - Bristol Virginia Public Schools

Day 1
Amy Tan, together with other Chinese American writers, explore aspects
of dual heritage.
We enjoy Tan's stories, because you learn about the emigrant experience
from reading them.
Elimination of unnecessary comma before subordinate clause
Correction of pronoun shiftSubject and verb agreement
Correction of commonly confused words
Day 1
Amy Tan, together with other Chinese American writers, explores aspects of
dual heritage.
Subject and verb agreement
_,
We enjoy Tan's stories because we learn about the immigrant experience from
reading them.
Elimination of unnecessary comma before subordinate clause
Correction of pronoun shift
Correction of commonly confused words
Day 2
Neither my friend nor my parents has seen the movie The Joy Luck Club,
which was made from Tan's book.
Tan was made an instant celebrity by the novel's publication.
Subject and verb agreement
Use of underlining or italics with movie title
Use of active voice to improve style
Day 2
Neither my friend nor my parents have seen the movie The Joy Luck Club,
which was made from Tan's book.
Subject and verb agreement
Use of underlining or italics with movie title
The novel's publication made Tan an instant celebrity.
Use of active voice to improve style
Day 3
The four mothers in the novel want their daughters to understand the
importance of self-respect. The mothers want their daughters to stand up for
theirselves.
The novel was more emotional than any book I have read this year.
Correct form of reflexive pronoun
Combining sentences
Elimination of illogical comparison
Day 3
The four mothers in the novel want their daughters to understand the
importance of self-respect and to stand up for themselves.
Combining sentences
Correct form of reflexive pronoun
The novel was more emotional than any other book I have read this year.
Elimination of illogical comparison
Day 4
Tan, the older of three children, was encouraged to succeed at an early
age.
Hopefully, Tan will be able to produce more exquisitely-crafted writing.
Correct comparison of an adjective
Elimination of misused adverb hopefully
Elimination of hyphen used with compound modifier
Day 4
Tan, the oldest of three children, was encouraged to succeed at an early
age.
Correct comparison of an adjective
We hope Tan will be able to produce more exquisitely crafted writing.
Elimination of misused adverb hopefully
Elimination of hyphen used with compound modifier
Day 5
Tan had a great deal of difficulty beginning a new novel. After the all
around success of The Joy Luck Club.
By the end of the summer of 1990 Tan begun and abandoned six novels.
Use of hyphen with prefix allCorrection of sentence fragment
Use of comma after introductory prepositional phrases
Use of past perfect tense
Day 5
Tan had a great deal of difficulty beginning a new novel after the
all-around success of The Joy Luck Club.
Correction of sentence fragment
Use of hyphen with prefix all-
By the end of the summer of 1990, Tan had begun and abandoned six novels.
Use of comma after introductory prepositional phrases
Use of past perfect tense