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Aim: How can we compare and
contrast Harrison Bergeron, the
short story, to 2081, the movie?
The basic components of
your short essay?
• Your short essay will consist of three
parts?
INTRODUCTION
1 - 3 BODY PARAGRAPH
A CONCLUSION
Aim: How can we compare and
contrast Harrison Bergeron, the
short story, to 2081, the movie?
Toolbox 5: Components of an introduction
--Always start with a “hook”—an attention grabber.
--Then, reference the work (title and author)
--Provide some plot description—1 or 2 sentences telling
summarizing what the work is about.
--Write your thesis statement—the topic you are trying to
prove and the three main points you will discuss in your body
paragraph.
--End, with a concluding sentence—a final statement that
brings together the ideas brought up in the paragraph and/or
emphasizes the main point one last time.
--MOST IMPORTANT—NEVER, EVER, USE “I” or “You” in your
entire essay, unless it is a narrative.
The
Introduction
Aim: How can we compare and
contrast Harrison Bergeron, the short
story, to 2081, the movie?
A full and complete paragraph consists of a MINIMUM of 6-10
sentences and follows a specific format:
THE HOOK (1st Sentence)
The HOOK is merely a catchy first sentence that will grab the
reader’s attention.
REFERENCE THE WORK: Name the title and author of the book
with the movie and give a brief description of the plot of both
pieces.
PLOT DESCRIPTION: Provide a brief synopsis of what your
topic/plot is about. (Is the movie’s plot description the same as
the book’s plot?)
THREE PART THESIS STATEMENT: Where the reader learns the
essay’s purpose. What is being proved. A basic thesis statement
contains the topic and the 3 main points you will use to support
your topic in the body paragraph.*
CONCLUDING SENTENCE (last sentence)
Each paragraph should end with a final statement that brings
together the ideas brought up in the paragraph and emphasizes
the main point one last time.
The Introduction
Aim: How can we compare and
contrast Harrison Bergeron, the
short story, to 2081, the movie?
Write an introduction explaining how the short story
and movie are similar or dissimilar.
• Introduction: Books made into movies are always
better than the film. Harrison Bergeron, the short
story, Kurt Vonnegut, and 2081, the movie version are
both about a rebellious young man living in a dystopian
society. The protagonist, Harrison, breaks free from
the oppressive government that handicaps. Although
the content is similar in both formats, the movie
version has too many dissimilarities from the short
story. The movie version does not depict
Harrison’s…(include the three points that support what
you will prove).
• Concluding sentence with transition word: Clearly, the
short story is better at illustrating Harrison’s escape
than the movie version.
BODY
PARAGRAPHS
Aim: How can we compare and contrast
Harrison Bergeron, the short story, to
2081, the movie.
• In a basic 3-5 paragraph essay, there are 1-3 body
paragraphs that all follow the same structure; but,
discuss and prove different points.
• Each body paragraph should discuss one of the points
mentioned in your thesis statement.
• You are trying to convince the reader that your point
is right.
• Each body paragraph needs a Topic Sentence + Plot
Description + Evidence + Explanation and finally a
Closing Sentence.
• Be sure to use transition phrases to connect your
ideas. (Ex: For instance, However, Therefore.
• Write a closing sentence.
• Repeat this 1-3 times.
Aim: How can we compare and
contrast Harrison Bergeron, the
short story, to 2081, the movie?
THE three points
in my thesis are
the three points
for my body
paragraph. DO
NOT number
them, that is
only to show you
my points.
Body1/Point 1:
THESIS FROM MY INTRODCUTION
The movie is much
different from the
story because
the title has been
changed, (1)
Harrison’s appearance has
changed, (2) and (3)
finally, the mother and
father’s roles are
switched.
Harrison Bergeron makes a
better title.
.
Evidence
Plot Description
+
“Now go back Piggy,
Evidence:
and take names.
The story
That’s
is more your
aboutjob”
its
(Golding conflict
25).
character’s
in a dystopian society,
than the year 2081.
Explanation +
Closing Sentence:
Harrison’s dilemma is
central to what happens at
the the end. Consequently,
2081 is simply a marker
for the future.
Explain:
NOW MOVE ON TO YOUR
2nd AND 3rd POINT AND
FOLLOW SAME FORMAT.
Aim: How can we contrast 1984, the novel,
with the 1956 movie version?
Body paragraph Example:
Harrison Bergeron makes makes a better title than
2081. The short story is more about its
character’s conflict—Harrison Bergeron—in a
dystopian society than the year 2081. For
instance, Harrison’s handicaps are the main cause
of his conflict. Although the society, seeks
equality, it is ineffective and Harrison’s
dilemma—breaking free—is central to what
happens at the the end. Consequently, 2081 is not
fitting as a title as it is simply a date used as a
marker for
the future.
Aim: How can we compare and contrast
Harrison Bergeron, the short story, to
2081, the movie?
TOOLBOX 6: FORMAL ESSAY WRITING RULES
• Do not use the first or second person (I, my, we, us).
• Do not use the past or future tense. You must write in the present tense.
• e.g. “Vonnegut demonstrates the evil in humans. ” NOT “Vonnegut
demonstrated the evil in humans.”
• Do not use contractions (can’t, won’t, doesn’t use cannot, will not, etc).
• Do not use clichés: “When it rains, it pours.”
• Never say what you are doing: “This essay will discuss...” (future tense)
or “This essay discusses” or “In my opinion...”
• Avoid using “a lot, very, nice, bad, cool, stuff, or any words that are
conversational.
• Avoid redundancy and repetition. You may not repeat a word more than
twice.
– Be specific. Do not use words such as “things” or “many examples,” or
“them.” What things? Which examples? Who is them? Do not be vague.
Aim: How can we compare and contrast
Harrison Bergeron, the short story, to
2081, the movie
The Conclusion
• The conclusion brings together ALL of the main points of
the essay. Start with a transition word.
• It refers back to and REPHRASES (NOT RESTATES) the
THESIS. Do not repeat it in the same way!
• Summarizes the three major points again. Don't simply
repeat things that were in your paper. Say them in a new
way.
• Include a statement that gives your reader something new
to think about, perhaps a way to use your paper in the "real"
world.
• Finally, end with a concluding sentence that leaves an
impression.
#1 RULE IN ANY CONCLUSION
DO NOT INTRODUCE NEW EVIDENCE,
Aim: How can we compare and contrast
Harrison Bergeron, the short story, to 2081,
the movie
Writing a conclusion
Write a conclusion: (Remember your thesis):
The movie version has too many dissimilarities from
the short story.
• Conclusion: All in all, the written version of the story
is better than the film adaptation. Vonnegut’s
Bergeron and his graphic illustrations of his handicaps
come alive on the page. Especially, in his description
of Bergeron’s appearnce. Add your other points here.
Concluding sentence with transition word: Overall,
Bradbury’s work suffers from minor details when
seen on the screen.
» VOTE 3-2-1
Aim: How can we compare and
contrast Harrison Bergeron, the
short story, to 2081, the movie.
3/6 Do Now:
A. Write a topic sentence for your body paragraph.
B. Write a topic sentence for your conclusion.
Aim: How can we compare and
contrast Harrison Bergeron, the
short story, to 2081, the movie.
SAT Word #13
myriad: a countless or extremely great number.
EX: I have a myriad of books on my shelf.
EX: I have a myriad of emotions during a 24 hour
period.
Synonym: multitude, a large/great number or
quantity.
How to Begin
Aim: How can we compare and contrast
Harrison Bergeron, the short story, to
2081, the movie?
• Activity:
• You will spend the entire period
finishing your first draft.
• I will rotate and help you with your
drafts.
How to Begin
Aim: How can we compare and contrast
Harrison Bergeron, the short story, to
2081, the movie?
• Homework:
• Finish your completed first draft.
• Due tomorrow.
How to Begin
Aim: How can we compare and contrast
Harrison Bergeron, the short story, to
2081, the movie?
• EXIT TICKET:
• WHICH OF THE ESSAY PARAGRAPHS
HAVE BEEN THE MOST DIFFICULT TO
WRITE. EXPLAIN.